So yeah. I have read quite a few sci-fi books in my time. You know. In maths class in year 9. Got into trouble for that. Anyway. I have now read 2.5 books on how to write a novel, and some of the editing suggestions and methods suggested in those books. I have been reading, but mostly reference / non-fiction / biography as that's where my interests have been recently. I also fairly recently read the collected stories of Arthur C Clarke. So awesome to see his evolution as a writer... But now I want to read some sci-fi again to see how they do certain things I would like to do, to get a feel for descriptions of processes and people involved in processes and perhaps descriptions of alien worlds, etc. So I chose a couple of books and started reading one last night. And I have not experienced this before, but I am finding myself really critical of the writing. I am constantly yanked out of any level of immersion. It's distracting, to say the least. I'd like to post a couple of examples: Now I am no expert on grin styles, but this sounds about right: wolfish; resembling or likened to a wolf, especially in being rapacious, voracious, or lascivious. rapacious: aggressively greedy voracious: wanting or devouring great quantities of food lascivious: feeling or revealing an overt sexual interest or desire. I am just trying to picture myself as the protagonist (James) receiving a wolfish grin from this guy I just met a few days ago when we do anything together. It just feels... wrong. There's been no indication Daniel appreciates my sweaty form in the zero g training area. Or watching my muscles flex. Just a shared "ow that was difficult" moment and a realisation the training continues tomorrow? The other example was the following. At one point they have this conversation: then an hour later, the author notes: A fierce passion. If I have a fierce passion for something I do it all week and take any chance I can get to do it. I can't see 10 games of chess being more than enough when I have a fierce passion for it? Anyway. My questions are: * has anyone else experienced a similar literary minded upgrade once they started writing / editing? * does it get better? ie can you leave your editing hat and grammar hat behind and just be immersed in novels again or do you have to be more selective and go for better quality writing / editing to get the same escapism feeling? * am I simply being too harsh? which is tough really, coz I cannot unprogram how I perceive words and expressions in a hurry... Really curious what others have experienced?