I've just received feedback from on my 1st 3 chapters and my repeated use of words was highlighted as a possible irritation. I hope this isn't pasting too much in here and I like the way the system finds previous threads with similar titles. The guy highlighted jangling but not controlled power. They both seem ok to me. It's not dialogue by the way, it's my creepy arsonist in 1st person taking the reader through what he does as he is doing it. At first I enjoyed the jangling down the marrow of my bones, but jangling nerves are the sign of a novice. Now I enjoy the mature feeling of control over a building. I enjoy feeling absolute power over the people within. The jangling comes from fear. I have no fear. I have controlled power. Controlled power is not a surge, controlled power is continuous.