This works just as well. It was the ambiguity that caused the confusion. Actually, I think this is better. I like it. Don't rush it. Take the whole scene up to the explosion from her perspective as if she's entering hostile combatant territory. It works for multiple reasons. It creates better suspense, and despite the fact that she's pretending in order to get their attention and establish a specific dynamic from the start, it also aptly symbolizes her real apprehensions. When you get that page or a chapter going, throw it in the workshop. I'd love to read it.