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    Shenanigator's Progress Journal

    Discussion in 'Progress Journals' started by Shenanigator, Sep 22, 2017.

    ACCOMPLISHED:
    8/9/2017 Began Writing Alexei and Katherine story.
    8/12/17 Characters have names, Alexei's backstory and motivations are complete.
    8/22/2017 9 pages edited and complete after re-write. Olga's name changed to Yelena.
    8/31/2017 First Alpha read (1 reader) --characters, plot thus far
    9/5/2017 50 pages edited and complete.
    9/18/2017 Completed Character interviews.
    9/20/2017 Wrote scene synopses to find plot holes, inconsistencies, scenes to eliminate.

    TO DO:
    Scene Fixes per Scene Synopses:
    Rework: "Alexei Ticket" scene???
    Rework: "Evening of The Musical" scene to advance the plot more. (As written, advances the characters only.)
    Rework: "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene. Need to highlight Alexei's playing, per rehearsal room scene foreshadowing.

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" 1981.
    Resolve questions from notes.

    Re-write Synopses for corrected scenes to keep track of progress.
    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    8/31/17 Wrote first-ever sex scene! Whoo hoo! ;-)

    (Can't find the "Thread Tools" menu, so I hope I'm doing this correctly!)
     
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    9/23/2017 Wrote K's resolution; the change she makes into trust.
     
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    9/23/17 Reworked "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene (see list at beginning of thread)
     
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    9/23/17 Finished 2017 to 1980 Currency conversion!!!! (Site is located in Bookmarks folder for WIP)
     
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    TO DO:
    Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer
    Research-- Interviews: NYC young adults 1980 (Focus on The Village)

    Scene Fixes per Scene Synopses:
    Rework: "Alexei Ticket" scene???
    Rework: "Evening of The Musical" scene to advance the plot more. (As written, advances the characters only.)

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" 1981.
    Resolve questions from notes.

    Re-write Synopses for corrected scenes to keep track of progress.
    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    TO DO:
    Research-- Interview the running route maker.
     
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    Updated 9/29/17

    ACCOMPLISHED:
    8/9/2017 Began Writing Alexei and Katherine story.
    8/12/17 Characters have names, Alexei's backstory and motivations are complete.
    8/22/2017 9 pages edited and complete after re-write. Olga's name changed to Yelena.
    8/31/2017 First Alpha read (1 reader) --characters, plot thus far
    8/31/2017 Wrote first-ever sex scene! Whoo hoo! ;-)
    9/5/2017 50 pages edited and complete.
    9/18/2017 Completed Character interviews.
    9/20/2017 Wrote scene synopses to find plot holes, inconsistencies, scenes to eliminate.
    9/23/2017 Reworked "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene (see list at beginning of thread)
    9/23/2017 Wrote K's resolution; the change she makes into trust.
    9/23/2017 Finished 2017 to 1980 Currency conversion!!!! (Site is located in Bookmarks folder for WIP)
    9/25/2017 Wrote Running Scene. Added new character.
    9/26/2017 Polished Running Scene & new character dialogue.
    9/26/2017 Rewrote synopsis to reflect reworked and polished scenes.


    TO DO:

    Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer
    Research-- Interviews: NYC young adults 1980 (Focus on The Village)
    Research-- Interview the running route maker.

    Scene Fixes per Scene Synopses:
    Rework: "Alexei Ticket" scene???
    Rework: "Evening of The Musical" scene to advance the plot more. (As written, advances the characters only.)

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" 1981.
    (in progress) Resolve questions from notes.

    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    Week of 9/25/2017: Firmly in Novella length!
    9/27/2017: Wrote the big, hairy, emotional scene!


    TO DO:
    Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer
    Final Fact check-- NYC settings (discuss with the "New York Advisory Board")
    Final Fact check -- burn description (discuss with Gr)
    Final Fact check --Running route (discuss with running route maker).
     
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    ACCOMPLISHED:
    8/9/2017 Began Writing Alexei and Katherine story.
    8/12/17 Characters have names, Alexei's backstory and motivations are complete.
    8/22/2017 9 pages edited and complete after re-write. Olga's name changed to Yelena.
    8/31/2017 First Alpha read (1 reader) --characters, plot thus far
    8/31/2017 Wrote first-ever sex scene! Whoo hoo! ;-)
    9/5/2017 50 pages edited and complete.
    9/18/2017 Completed Character interviews.
    9/20/2017 Wrote scene synopses to find plot holes, inconsistencies, scenes to eliminate.
    9/23/2017 Reworked "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene (see list at beginning of thread)
    9/23/2017 Wrote K's resolution; the change she makes into trust.
    9/23/2017 Finished 2017 to 1980 Currency conversion!!!! (Site is located in Bookmarks folder for WIP)
    9/25/2017 Wrote Running Scene. Added new character.
    Week of 9/25/2017: Firmly in Novella length!
    9/26/2017 Polished Running Scene & new character dialogue.
    9/26/2017 Rewrote synopsis to reflect reworked and polished scenes.

    9/27/2017: Wrote the big, hairy, emotional scene!

    TO DO:


    Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer
    Final Fact check-- NYC settings (discuss with the "New York Advisory Board")
    Final Fact check -- burn description (discuss with Gr)
    Final Fact check --Running route (discuss with running route maker).

    Scene Fixes per Scene Synopses:
    IN PROG. Rework: "Alexei Ticket" scene???
    IN PROG. Rework: "Evening of The Musical" scene to advance the plot more. (As written, advances the characters only.)

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" 1981.
    IN PROG. Resolve questions from notes.

    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    9/30/2017 Changed F MC name spelling to Kathryn. NTS1: Checked and period correct for 1962. NTS2: Getting rid of the appearance of third syllable (Kath/er/ine) makes it easier for reader's "ear" to hear Alexei say it in his accent without phonetically spelling his accent ("KAS-ren"). Remember this and resist the urge to change it back!
     
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    10/03/2017 So, so, so stuck on WIP. To quote one of my faves, "I can't write a love (story) the way I feel today."

    I did finish the train scene... Ugh.
     
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    ACCOMPLISHED:
    8/9/2017 Began Writing Alexei and Katherine story.
    8/12/17 Characters have names, Alexei's backstory and motivations are complete.
    8/22/2017 9 pages edited and complete after re-write. Olga's name changed to Yelena.
    8/31/2017 First Alpha read (1 reader) --characters, plot thus far
    8/31/2017 Wrote first-ever sex scene! Whoo hoo! ;-)
    9/5/2017 50 pages edited and complete.
    9/18/2017 Completed Character interviews.
    9/20/2017 Wrote scene synopses to find plot holes, inconsistencies, scenes to eliminate.
    9/23/2017 Reworked "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene (see list at beginning of thread)
    9/23/2017 Wrote K's resolution; the change she makes into trust.
    9/23/2017 Finished 2017 to 1980 Currency conversion!!!! (Site is located in Bookmarks folder for WIP)
    9/25/2017 Wrote Running Scene. Added new character.
    Week of 9/25/2017: Firmly in Novella length!
    9/26/2017 Polished Running Scene & new character dialogue.
    9/26/2017 Rewrote synopsis to reflect reworked and polished scenes.

    9/27/2017: Wrote the big, hairy, emotional scene!

    9/30/2017 Changed F MC name spelling to Kathryn. NTS1: Checked and period correct for 1962. NTS2: Getting rid of the appearance of third syllable (Kath/er/ine) makes it easier for reader's "ear" to hear Alexei say it in his accent.
    10/03/2017 Finished the train scene.
    10/04-06/2017 Wrote 4th of July weekend
    10/05/2017 Added new character and devised her part of plot.
    10/06/2017 Alexei has a full name and ancestry.
    10/06/2017 Kathryn has a full name, which adds to plot.
    10/06/2017 Character birth dates and age difference determined

    TO DO:


    Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer
    IN PROG. Final Fact check-- NYC settings (discuss with the "New York Advisory Board")
    Final Fact check -- burn description (discuss with Gr)
    IN PROG Final Fact check --Running route (discuss with running route maker).
    Fact check -- classical music terms for correct terminology (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)
    Fact check --Alexei's practice routine (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)

    Scene Fixes per Scene Synopses:
    IN PROG. Rework: "Alexei Ticket" scene???
    IN PROG. Rework: "Evening of The Musical" scene to advance the plot more. (As written, advances the characters only.)

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" 1981.
    IN PROG. Resolve questions from notes.

    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    10/07/2017: Wrote and polished dialogue "The Birthday Scene." Alexei's moral dilemma is now clear in the dialogue, not just in his thoughts.
     
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    10/08/2017 Re-worked "Alexei ticket" scene.
    10/09/2017 Re-worked "the musical" scene
     
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    10/18/2017: Resolved questions from notes.
    10/19/2017: Waiter research
    10/19/2017: Polished and added new mannerisms to previous dialogue. Alexei is a smoker.
    10/20/2017: Wrote Kat and Kim Montauk scene.
    10/20-10/23/2017: Polished and added to dinner party cater-waiter champagne scene with patron of the arts.
    10/21/2017: All backstory notes and minor plot holes are resolved!!!!
     
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    GOAL:
    10/23/2017 Must. Be. Braver. About. Showing. Fiction. Writing. To. Others!!!

    Rant to vent: My co-workers have no idea I'm writing fiction, although they know I write non-fiction because my non-fic writing, frankly, has served them well at times. Most of my co-workers are OK people who would be supportive. But I'm having serious anxiety at the thought of my WIP--Long novella? Short novel? Whatever, I'll worry about defining it later--being forwarded and passed around to each other. (Which it would be. God love 'em, they're a gossipy bunch in a competitive field, and that's how they roll.)

    It's a soapy love story (wasn't expecting it to be that, but here we are), there's a controversial storyline I've had to tone down, there may be a second controversial story line (I'm really not that much of a freak, I swear), and for the love of God, there is a sex scene. Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagh!

    This freakout is slowing down my writing progress. In Alexei's syntax, "Not finishing means they would never have to see it, yes?" Yes! Exactly!

    PROS: 1. I'm writing bravely. 2. I'm writing in 3rd to challenge myself, because writing in 1st was always...not easy, but easiER. 3. I've given one of the characters my screwed-up family dynamic to finally exorcise myself of it. 3.b. Parents are no longer living, and the only relatives I care about are kind and supportive of me, so that part isn't scary. 4.Alpha likes it, gives honest feedback when I screw up, and waits with bated breath for the next installment. 5.Creative people I hung out with over the summer were non-judgy and are supportive because they're working on their own creative projects.

    BIG, UGLY, HAIRY CONS: 1. I've reached the point where I can't tell if what I have so far is mildly clever or hideously stupid. 2. What if, as C.B. DeMille says about Norma Desmond's horrendous script in Sunset Boulevard, "There are good things in it, yes." (Hollywood speak for "It sucks!!!!") 3.What if Alpha doesn't know what she's talking about? 4. What if I chose the wrong Alpha?

    POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:

    1. [Knocks forehead on desk] Ouch. 2. Use pen name so they never have to find out. But then of course I'll find another potential audience to freak out over. 3.Go eat something, it's mid-afternoon and I just realized I've had no protein today. 4.Shut the fuck up and write.



     
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    10/23/2017: Freak out over, at least for now. Living in a creative community is immensely helpful. Neighbor noticed I was writing at Midnight and texted to ask if I wanted homemade pie. Yes! As it happened, I'd skipped dinner and was wondering what the heck to eat at that hour. This Forum is immensely helpful, too, and I'm grateful, but...pie! :bigsmile: (And she brought it over and handed it to me through the door, already on a plate with a fork, so I wouldn't have to stop.)

    10/24/2017: Polished dialogue between Alexei and Harold.
    10/24/2017: Finished fact check of running route.
    10/24/2017: Wrote dialogue between K & J. NTS: This is where K discovers an important part of Alexei's backstory, so if it goes, ya gotta put that in elsewhere!!!

    10/24/2017: "Present Day" is now officially November, 1980. NTS: Do not change this, that date leads to the ending!!!


    TO DO:

    Thanksgiving week: If I haven't figured it out by then, have Alpha read for plot options.
    ("What's bugging you?"
    "What do YOU want to see happen?"
    "What will piss you off if it happens?"
    "What do you desperately want to fix?"
    "Any actions that don't make sense?"
    "Anything you want to see more of/ less of?"
    If Alpha isn't burned out by these, add:
    "Who's your favorite minor character? / Why?"
    "What would you change about any of the characters / What do you hate?)

    (May not need this--save for later depending on plot) Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer

    IN PROG. Final Fact check-- NYC settings (discuss with the "New York Advisory Board")
    Final Fact check -- burn description (discuss with Gr)
    Fact check -- classical music terms for correct terminology (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)
    Fact check --Alexei's practice routine (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)

    Research Field Trip / Fact Check--Visit piano showroom (Steinway)

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" November 1980.
     

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    Your Q&A system for moving the plot along is similar to the one I adopted. It worked quite well and forced me to take notes, which I also found helpful.
     
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    Thank you. In this first draft, a lot has happened in these people's lives, and hard choices will have to be made. (Me, not the characters.) Darlings will be killed.

    As a non-fiction writer, asking questions comes naturally to me. When I research something I ask tons of questions, so it's nice to know this methodology has a shot in hell of working with my Alpha as well. This is the first time I've ever officially had an Alpha.

    And, thank you for piping in, @OurJud . When I started this progress journal, I was a 'fraidy cat who'd only been here a couple of days and immediately checked the box that no one could reply. When I got more comfortable and changed my mind, I couldn't find the thread option for unchecking it. So, forum members are definitely welcome.
     
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    ACCOMPLISHED:
    8/9/2017 Began Writing Alexei and Katherine story.
    8/12/17 Characters have names, Alexei's backstory and motivations are complete.
    8/22/2017 9 pages edited and complete after re-write. Olga's name changed to Yelena.
    8/31/2017 First Alpha read (1 reader) --characters, plot thus far
    8/31/2017 Wrote first-ever sex scene! Whoo hoo! ;-)
    9/5/2017 50 pages edited and complete.
    9/18/2017 Completed Character interviews.
    9/20/2017 Wrote scene synopses to find plot holes, inconsistencies, scenes to eliminate.
    9/23/2017 Reworked "Ready to Face Her Parents" scene (see list at beginning of thread)
    9/23/2017 Wrote K's resolution; the change she makes into trust.
    9/23/2017 Finished 2017 to 1980 Currency conversion!!!! (Site is located in Bookmarks folder for WIP)
    9/25/2017 Wrote Running Scene. Added new character.
    Week of 9/25/2017: Firmly in Novella length!
    9/26/2017 Polished Running Scene & new character dialogue.
    9/26/2017 Rewrote synopsis to reflect reworked and polished scenes.

    9/27/2017: Wrote the big, hairy, emotional scene!
    9/30/2017 Changed F MC name spelling to Kathryn. NTS1: Checked and period correct for 1962. NTS2: Getting rid of the appearance of third syllable (Kath/er/ine) makes it easier for reader's "ear" to hear Alexei say it in his accent.
    10/03/2017 Finished the train scene.
    10/04-06/2017 Wrote 4th of July weekend
    10/05/2017 Added new character and devised her part of plot.
    10/06/2017 Alexei has a full name and ancestry.
    10/06/2017 Kathryn has a full name, which adds to plot.
    10/06/2017 Character birth dates and age difference determined
    10/07/2017: Wrote and polished dialogue "The Birthday Scene." Alexei's moral dilemma is now clear in the dialogue, not just in his thoughts.
    10/08/2017 Re-worked "Alexei ticket" scene.
    10/09/2017 Re-worked "the musical" scene
    10/18/2017: Resolved questions from notes.
    10/19/2017: Waiter research
    10/19/2017: Polished and added new mannerisms to previous dialogue. Alexei is a smoker.
    10/20/2017: Wrote Kat and Kim Montauk scene.
    10/20-10/23/2017: Polished and added to dinner party cater-waiter champagne scene with patron of the arts.
    10/21/2017: All backstory notes and minor plot holes are resolved!!!!
    10/23/2017: Writer freakout over, at least for now.
    10/24/2017: Polished dialogue between Alexei and Harold.
    10/24/2017: Finished fact check of running route.

    10/24/2017: Wrote dialogue between K & J. NTS: This is where K discovers an important part of Alexei's backstory, so if you kill this, ya gotta put it in elsewhere!!!

    10/24/2017: "Present Day" is now officially November, 1980. NTS: Do not change this, that date leads to the ending!!!

    10/25/2017: Wrote more emotional impact into dialogue into A's "Morning After Discovery."



    TO DO:
    IN PROG. Final Fact check-- NYC settings (discuss with the "New York Advisory Board")
    Final Fact check -- burn description (discuss with Gr)
    Fact check -- classical music terms for correct terminology (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)
    Fact check --Alexei's practice routine (discuss with M; see list with page/paragraph notations in folder)
    (May not need this--do later if plot needs it) Research --Interview: piano tuner / restorer

    Research Field Trip / Fact Check--Visit piano showroom (Steinway Grand & Baby Grand)

    Alpha Read Thanksgiving week: If I haven't figured it out by then, have Alpha read for plot options.
    ("What's bugging you?"
    "What do YOU want to see happen?"
    "What will piss you off if it happens?"
    "What will piss you off if it doesn't happen?"
    "What do you desperately want to fix?"
    "Any actions that don't make sense?"
    "Anything you want to see more of/ less of?"
    "Who or What is unbelievable in this story?"

    If Alpha isn't burned out by these questions, add:
    "Who's your favorite minor character? / Why?"
    "What would you change about any of the characters / Who do you love? Hate?" / Why?)
    "Which character has experienced the most personal growth?"

    Get out of flashback and back to "present day" November 1980.

    Update Scene Synopsis
    Print all pages and proof grammar, punctuation.
     
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    We have a title! We have a title! We have a title!!!!!!

    HALLELUJAH AND PRAISE BE TO THE WRITING GODS AND MUSES, WE HAVE A TITLE!!!!!


    I'm good at writing headlines, but lousy at titles, so this is gigantic. I honestly thought someone else would end up titling this project (Alpha, Editor, perhaps Agent if I were so lucky).

    But last night, as I was falling asleep, it drifted in. I was almost asleep, so I sat up, turned on the light, frantically reached for paper and a pen but could not find paper (WTF?), grabbed my phone in frustration and typed the title into Evernote.

    This morning I looked it up in the dictionary and thesaurus to be absolutely certain it would be used correctly in reference to both MCs.

    We have a title!!!

    I texted Alpha, who pulls no punches on these things, waited with bated breath, and the response text was,

    "PERFECT!!!"

    Thank God.


    ETA: Even if the title changes (happens all the time, due to marketing needs, etc.), that's fine. I'm never married to a title. I'm just thrilled there is one, because saying things like "the Alexei and Kathryn untitled story" is tedious.
     
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    Apparently, finally getting a title has unblocked something I didn't realized was blocked...

    This morning while making coffee, I realized that sometime between the title drifting in last night and the wee hours of this morning, I had a dream that gave the idea that solved an issue a character was struggling with. (Of course I still have to write it, which is a whole other thing. We're not at that point in the story yet.)

    When I realized the idea had arrived, I felt instantly lighter. Apparently, without even realizing it, I had taken on the character's feeling of hopelessness about the issue that character is struggling to overcome. This was a surprise, because I haven't felt depressed or sad or hopeless in any way.

    Having seen a possible way to solve it, though, I suddenly felt like screaming from the rooftops with glee.

    Somewhere in the Land of Wherever Characters Go While They Are Not Being Written or Read, Alexei must be breathing a huge sigh of relief.
     
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    ACCOMPLISHED:
    10/26/2017:
    Polished dialogue between Kat and Kim.
    10/27/2017: Edited and polished cater-waiter champagne scene dialogue. (Still not 100%, but getting better. I did this on my phone in the waiting room of the doctor's office...can I get extra points for that? I thought not...)
    10/27/2017: Tightened kitchen dialogue between K& A.

    Questions to ponder:

    1. Is Kathryn's change to more mature dialogue too abrupt, or is her "new" voice appropriate? (Ask Alpha before making any major changes.)

    2. Just how skin-crawling should the skin-crawlingly creepy thing be?

    3. Is the resolution that will end that one character's unhappiness too convenient? What is the emotionally satisfying resolution, since a happily ever after resolution cannot be believably achieved?
     
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    REVELATION I SHOULD HAVE SEEN BEFORE BUT JUST NOW FIGURED OUT:

    I figured out why I'm having such a hard time writing fiction in 3rd. I keep struggling to "show" instead of "tell" and to make the writing look pretty in 3rd, and now I understand why:

    Old-school, hard news newspaper writing training, that's why! Duh...Tell who, what, when, where, how, and sometimes why, in 3rd person, and "just the facts." No "show"ing, and no adjectives because the goal is to make the front page, above the fold, and there are precious few column inches available there. And if we were describing something, adverbs were considered a lesser evil than adjectives, because adjectives are more likely to creep over toward opinion.

    Now I understand why I used to beg my professor to please for God's sake just let me write Features (which have more column inches of real estate, so you get to use adjectives, write more descriptive passages, and show instead of tell). I was doing a ton of fiction writing at the time.

    It also explains my writing process on this WIP. I've been writing non-dialogue passages very bare boned, and then I go back and add the pretty stuff. It's because that's how I learned to do it for print newspapers. You have to make the print deadline, and a more important story might break, so you write a bare bones version to get the story down first. Then if you have time and column inches to spare, you add more to it. That way you have a complete story ready to go, and it's a short version in case you need to make room for something else. But if you don't need the room, you have a more completely told story.

    Talk about not being able to see the forest for the cut down and pulped trees... o_O

    Maybe now that I know the "why," I can fix it.
     
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