This doesn't feel like a fragment - just want to make sure - oh, here's my sentence - Over the ravioli is a squiggle of sauce decorated like a red, black and white milk snake. I started with over because the previous sentence includes the phrase 'pillow of ravioli' and I didn't want it to show up in the same pattern, near the end, echoing it.
Why not? Sometimes you have to go with what feels right. I am definitely not a stickler for the rules of grammar. Over has been used as the first word in a well known and loved sentence and I haven't heard any complaints. Remember "Over the river and through the woods, to grandmother's house we go?" "I started with over because the previous sentence includes the phrase 'pillow of ravioli' and I didn't want it to show up in the same pattern, near the end, echoing it." Did you catch the "echo" as you wrote or with proof reading? I almost never catch these things as I write.
I try not to edit as I go but I'm endlessly looking backwards, always tinkering, changing a word, a dirrection. I tend to fret over each sentence. Perhaps too much.
Starting with a preposition is perfectly acceptable. After all, word order is important in emphasizing certain words and not others.
I read milk SHAKE and was really confused for a while.... This isn't useful, I just thought I'd share. Sorry.
...'over' to start is ok, but the sentence makes no sense because as worded, it has the sauce being decorated, not the ravioli... "...a squiggle of sauce decorated like a red, black and white milk snake."
it's not a fragment, since if you reverse the order of the opening prepositional phrase, 'a squiggle of sauce is over the ravioli' makes it clearly and definitely a full sentence, albeit a very poorly worded one...
I think she means way the sauce appeared on the dish reminded her of a Milk Snake. I think it is fine to start a sentence with the word over but the sentence here does need rewording
how about re phrasing the sentance to be more like "poured over the ravioli is a squiggle of sauce the red, black and white colours decorate the dish like the markings on a milk snake"
Thanks for the help guys. Although I liked the sentense - the sauce resembling a red, black and white milk snake ( which is how I reworded it ) it was ditched in the final rewrite. Not enough room and it was frills anyway.
It is fine. I'm just saying I was a dumbass and didn't read it right. I read sHake instead of sNake. I thought that was funny, because imagine the difference. I thought, how can it look like a milk shake?
It wouldn't be a milk shake you would want to drink that's for sure. I see what you mean it is easy to misread it and read sHake instead of sNake I think that's due to all the food in the sentence. It puts you in a culinary frame of mind lol
How about this: Over the ravioli is a squiggle of sauce, which decorated it like a milk snake. And Cog - where did that excerpt come from? It's very good
