Hi, I'm Brian (or I'd prefer you call me as such) and I've been writing an, err, fanfiction for (x) fandom. It's harder for me to work with pre-created characters, so I've been working on this to get a bit better at it, since I liked the idea anyways. But I digress. Anyways, in the beginning of the story, it shows a character (pre-known to the intended audience of the story) shoot their self, and it later explains the reasoning behind his actions; though, technically, it's easy to guess from the start. For a helpful explanation, it's basically: Character A asks Character B to kill Character C. Character B, however, is friends with Character C, but doesn't want to disappoint Character A. So, Character B commits suicide so they won't have to choose. Character B is only important in this story because they add to the background of the story; the actual main character is Character D, who (shockingly) is traumatized after witnessing the video tapes from Character B's death - and from a first person perspective, I might add. Frankly, I'm a bit confused on how to write this scene. I've already wrote it down and tried revising it, but I feel like it's been made so poorly it's almost offensive. I want it to be dramatic, but I'll admit I've never tried to write out a character's death before. I also understand that suicide is a sketchy topic (if I release it, I'll make sure to put a warning), and I don't want to seem like a jerk who not only doesn't understand suicide, but acts like it's something to be glorified. If necessary, I can submit a copy of the excerpt from the story with the names edited out (I *really* don't want to be copyright claimed, so I plan to release it on one of the websites dedicated for fanfiction, or just hide it in my files forever.) This isn't so much of a critique thing so far, I just want to know how to do it, because I feel like it seems poorly written so far. I assumed it didn't belong on workshop because it's not technically me asking for critique; it's me asking for advice.