1. Tenderiser

    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    Synopsis Synopsis critique?

    Discussion in 'Query & Cover Letter Critique' started by Tenderiser, Oct 30, 2015.

    Would anyone be willing to read and critique my draft synopsis? It's 1300 words / three pages of A4, double spaced. Most UK agents ask for a synopsis rather than a query, or in addition to a query, and it will probably decide whether they request the partial/full manuscript or not.

    What I want to know is:
    • If any details could be cut (condensing 110k words into 1300 is hard...)
    • If any parts don't make sense
    • What you think the tone of the book is, based on the synopsis
    • Do the characters seem sympathetic
    • Does anything just seem wrong
    I'd also like to know if you think an agent would be interested enough to request the full manuscript, but I know most people on this forum wouldn't be interested in a romance. I'd still like to hear your thoughts and will try to filter them through a romance reader's perspective. Obviously if you are a romance reader, bonus! :D

    Since it shows the ending of the novel and all the secrets that will come out, I'd like to do it over PM rather than publicly. Thanks in advance!
     
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  2. Jeff Countryman

    Jeff Countryman Living the dream

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    I would. It's gonna cost ya :) (just kidding)
    Love your enthusiasm for it.
     
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    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    Woo! I will PM you. :D
     
  4. Jeff Countryman

    Jeff Countryman Living the dream

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    :)
     
  5. Tenderiser

    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    Anyone else?

    It's a quick read, promise :D
     
  6. BayView

    BayView Huh. Interesting. Contributor

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    I can have a look, if you want.
     
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    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    Thank you, I'll send a PM. I really appreciate it. :)
     
  8. Mckk

    Mckk Member Supporter Contributor

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    Love romance and I enjoy writing it myself. Happy to take a look if you like :)
     
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    Lifeline South. Staff Contributor

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    I am game :)
     
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    Id be happy to take a look. I'm feeling a little unimaginative today, so I'll probably just answer your bullet point questions rather than offering up stuff on my own.
     
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    Selbbin The Moderating Cat Staff Contributor

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    ok
     
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  12. Kalleth Bright-Talon

    Kalleth Bright-Talon Member

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    If you still want opinions, I'd be glad to give mine!
     
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    Tenderiser Not a man or BayView

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    I will take you all up on that! I'm just implementing some changes from the feedback I've had already and then I will send you the revised version to see if I've fixed the problems. :)

    Thank you everyone!
     
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    Jeff Countryman Living the dream

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    @Tenderiser - just sent you a message/review. So sorry that it slipped my mind. I must be getting old LOL.
     
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    It looks fantastic @Tenderiser!
     

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