The art of the critique. Lately I've noticed the story critiques have tended towards grammar, spelling, tense correction, and basic language mechanics. As for me, that's not why I'm here. There is something fundamentally wrong with the story, and that's why I posted it. I get a fair number of views but no comments other than, mechanical corrections. I will find those myself eventually. What I really want to know is, if you got through it without forcing yourself. Could you relate, did it make you feel something? Please comment, one way or the other, even if you can't put your finger on what is wrong. It's Okay, it sucks, it's great, I couldn't get through it, any of those are better than nothing. Thank you for your kind attention.