1. katina

    katina Contributor Contributor

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    the best poem you have written so far

    Discussion in 'Poetry' started by katina, Jun 10, 2018.

    post it here
    and please make sure it is no longer then 10 lines

    I start

    poetry is pleasing
    the words it is using
    is light
    it wishes to convey
    heights
    without abusing rights
    or left is what it has to
    go out of sight
     
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    She told me that somehow, 'some day', 'one day', but now no way will one day, 'some day' come.
    The nightmare to make it to Monday some way. Dreaming, of seeing, that Sunday's done.

    Fighting to stay as I stay just to fight it. Another one passes, too many gone.
    A testament to strength if I'm stronger than my weakness. Either way I see, this weeks too long.

    Gotta be a man, on my own two, standing. Way too grown to be crying for my mum.
    As for the 'one day' never gonna come hey. Now never will I ever be anyone's son.

    Your getting in my business, just to take the piss it's, you being you so I just play along.
    I wish she was here, and you not there, if you cared I wouldn't care if you asked what's wrong.
     
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    I don't want to post it -- I'm really not much of a poet! (and also I might try to publish it) -- but I think the best poem I ever wrote was the one that inspired an ex-friend of mine to write a song that used it as lyrics. That was pretty cool.
     
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    I really like this one I wrote last year. Unlike most of my stuff I think it’s easy to relate to (if you eat sushi!) :

    Sushi

    Umami rainbow mansions glisten

    Arrayed with precision.

    I pincer my stilts between their alleys

    Eying the viands

    I meet and greet with a biting smile

    Plucking delicately

    Pruning the symmetry to fill my hunger,

    With a wash of brown,

    With a glob of green,

    I am wholly satified to end with pickled pink.
     
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  5. katina

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    this is a great piece.
    the first two stanzas are so relatable.
    much enjoyed :)
     
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    no one is a poet until they try :)
    if you have another one to show that would be great!!
     
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    nice one. :)
    a couple of words here i dont recognise/know. I underlined them.
    viand sounds like meat but in french?!
    Umami may be the name of the Sushi?!
    Eving not sure. Is that a verb?

    much enjoyed.
     

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