Has anybody read Donald Maass's Writing the Breakout Novel? The second chapter is about writing a great premise, and I'm thinking mine could use some work. As I understand it, it's kind of like the back cover of the book. Mine is: Edit thanks to @OJB: A criminal who thinks only of himself has to protect the world from the apocalyspse. Original: A criminal who has always taken the easy way out, and has never trusted anybody, must rise to become a powerful mage and protect the world from the Apocalypse. While he is intelligent and given many benefits in life, he eschewed them and blamed others for his faults. When his new friends and protectors are attacked by the forces of the Horseman of Pestilence, he is forced to accept his role in his own lousy life. Along the way he will be forced to grow up as he's dragged through the savage, cunning and magical world that he never knew was right in front of him. I have four questions regarding this. 1. Did I get the Maass' definition of premise correct? 2. Are you interested in my premise? 3. Does it contain Maass's points (Plausibility(as far as fantasy can go), Inherent Conflict, Originality, and a Gut Emotional appeal)? 4. What are great premises you have?