ok I'm struggling to decide if I should keep the prologue at the start of my work. Some Background :- The Story is a Gothic Fantasy ... fantasy with 2 main protagonists. The story is told though Close 3rd Pov though both of their eye's. They don't actually meet till midway though the book and at that point it shifts so one of them very much takes the lead. The world ticks on daily and most humans think they rule it, but beneath the surface is another supernatural world where vampires and werewolf's etc are real. Note : I'm aiming for a dark theme in the book, we aren't talking fluff vampires who fall in love with mortal girls here. The aim is to have something which doesn't quite reach the 'horror' niche but likewise doesn't show vampires as 'missundersood' creatures. Vampires aren't inherently evil.. however the reality of vampire society is that its a dog eat dog world, the tough survive and the weak quite literally get eaten. Add to that .. the drive for blood and the century's of life, it's a world where it's hard to keep your humanity. So as the vampires age they find it increasingly more difficult to keep a connection with the mortal world. The 2 main characters are a warlock and a newly embraced vampire. The warlocks/vampires have been at war for centuries.. im comfortable with the intro of the warlock that takes place in the 2nd chapter. The vampire is the one I'm having difficulty with. The vampire lead is female and the story is really a coming of age story for her where she learns to accept her new 'condition' and hunts for the vampire which turned her. Chapter 1 opens with her being dragged to see the vampire leader having been found 'turned' and abandoned. (creating new vampires is strictly monitored/controlled within society so her existence is a breach of their laws) The whole first chapter is supposed to give a glimpse of how tough her life will be, she's given to 'another vampire' to look after/teach but he really doesn't want her and sees her as burden he could do without. So questions .... 1) The first chapter is 'her awakening' I'm writing In close 3rd person so I want the tension to be high, she's confused, sick, beaten and bruised, she likely won't understand 10% of the discussions that are happening around her by the vampires making a decision on her future. I've tried writing it from Third Person Omniscient but it just ended up as an info dump which didn't work as the conversations the vampires had didn't feel 'natural' they are talking amongst each other they don't need to explain to each other specific rules, vampire biology or why the 'mentor' doesn't want her. I debated writing it from the mentors POV but I really don't want to many POV character's floating about and I don't want to give readers too much insight into his head early on . Any ideas on how to write from her POV ... without leaving readers totally baffled at the end of it?? she is injured, in pain and confused but I don't want the readers to be. 2) There is a scene before chapter 1, whilst she is still human her 'last night' as a human if you like. In this scene to would learn about who she was and her life. in this scene the key point is her 'first encounter' with the main warlock character. It's important for later storylines that this meeting happened while she was human. I've written it and it gives a good introduction into who she is and that she's a good person it also sets up the warlock, but I feel it doesn't really set the scene for the book and I'm concerned that it doesn't draw in the readers as much as hitting chapter 1 would. Ideas?