I was surprised to find a completed story on my comp. Old though, so in a serious need of a rewrite. I showed it to my friend, who really liked most of the story, but one part disturbed her. To explain, the story is about two siblings, John (age 16) and Lilly (age 12), and their great-uncle Christopher. Chris has told them strange and grotesque stories their entire lives, and one night they end up trapped in Christopher's fairy-tail world. At some point in the story, Lilly is kidnapped by a more or less insane Lord, called Ludwig. Ludwig is a pedophile, who marries young girls and kills them when they get too old. He is only willing to release Lilly if John can find a more suitable bride for him. Lilly then reminds John of the story of Bernadette, a young girl who wished for immortality, and was therefor cursed to forever live in a child's body, unable to attain the love of a man. John finds Bernadette and brings her to Ludwig, merging the two tales, and Ludwig and Bernadette lives happily ever after (kind of). Apparently, this is “just wrong”, to quote my friend. Is it really that bad? I kind of think it's sweet... Besides, even though Bernadette has a child's body, her mind is of a grown womans'.