My beginning is a lot in my MC's head, and I want to go less angst, more action, but I'm having trouble figuring out how. So. 17 year old female MC. Fantasy-medieval setting. We meet our MC as she is helping her father at the mill, as she is the miller's daughter. She is mostly content with her small-town life, but feels there may be more out there. She wants to know more about her deceased mother, but her father refuses to tell her. Fast forward. She finds out her mother was a war hero, that she was a member of the elite Beast Riders (soldiers that ride mythological beasts like gryphons, unicorns, pegasi, etc) and that she had magic. Now some Beast Riders have come to town and want to recruit her. But her father tells her he's been receiving warnings/threats for years to keep her away from the Riders. MC receives one herself, with a threat of violence against loved ones if she doesn't comply. Her father adamantly refuses to let her go and wants her to stay and get married, be safe. Her mother died in service to the Riders and he is afraid to lose her too. Now. MC is a bit timid, the type of person to overthink things and worry about what-ifs. So she is now in this situation where she has had a ton of new information dumped on her and has a huge decision to make. She goes back-and-forth with herself a lot, dithering. There's a whole scene where she talks about what she learned with her best friend and tries to figure out where to go from there. A big part of the story is her personal growth from indecisive and timid to strong and commanding. But I think I've sort of overdone the dithering and angsting at the beginning. How do I cut back on this while still showing that she is completely of two minds about going away? Is there any way I could make her internal struggle more external and action-y ? (lol, you know what I mean) For example, here is one short scene where she is having an internal argument with herself: ******** Kaelie paced angrily in her room, her thoughts churning like a storm-whipped sea. Marry Alistair Vastel! She’d rather take her chances with the threatening stranger. If only there could be some middle ground. She loved her father, and life in Amberfield was comfortable and familiar. But was it worth staying if she was to be forced into an awful marriage? Yet how could she go and leave her father alone? It would break his heart. What if she wasn’t brave enough to do what the Wild Roses were asking of her? What if she didn’t have the same Wild Talent as her mother? She imagined showing up at Ridersdawn ready to go into the Beast Preserve, only to be turned away at the gate, deemed unworthy. Or worse, getting inside the Beast Preserve and then getting savaged by a wild Beast because she failed to meet its standards. She shuddered. But—there was so much she didn’t know about her mother. She had begged her father to tell her about her mother nearly every day growing up. Could she really walk away from this chance to learn about her life? I didn’t even know she was raised in Esharia, she thought. What about the rest of my family on her side? Are they still alive? Do they know about me? How would Mother feel if she could see me now? Can I sense the Beasts because of my mage blood, or is it something else? She sat down on the edge of her bed, and rubbed her face with her hands. Time was ticking. The Riders wouldn’t stay in Amberfield forever. They needed an answer.