Hello, wordsmiths. I am at an impasse. These are two sentences from my first chapter that I have been reading for so long that I've started to get hung up on them maybe not conveying the meaning I want, or sounding odd. "He had fished from an attic trunk his brother's thin tuxedo coat and pants that Raif had worn in his first wedding." He [the protagonist/Uaine] fishes from a trunk his brother's, Raif's, tuxedo coat and pants that Raif had worn during Raif's first wedding. I don't know if the current sentence above expresses that clearly enough. "Sleepy residents fled the apartment building and into the perimeter of police slinging everyone to the ground, the squatters and indigent, the welfare queens and foster-care scammers, and the genuine blue-collars as if they were all the same." Something feels wrong with this sentence. And the problem is that I have looked at it for so long that I can't really step back from it. Any thoughts? Thanks you.