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    What would this "sound" like?

    Discussion in 'Descriptive Development' started by GoodSeed, Feb 6, 2022.

    Hardboiled sweets falling on a wooden floor, scattering all over. What would the sweets hitting the floor sound like? Trying to come up with words to properly describe the sound. PS: they are in a bowl which topples scattering the sweets. Thanks for any suggestions.
     
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    pitter-patter: can be noun or verb
    or there are lots of similar onomatopoeic words like skitter and clatter and stutter - could make a coinage or mix two different ones
     
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    My mind immediately went to skitter.
     
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    Think of other hard things that fall onto hard surfaces and draw analogies.

    Gravel
    Shrapnel
    Sleet/Ice
    Marbles
    Ball Bearings/Other Hardware

    Which comparison you use will depend upon the context of your story/passage.
     
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    What kind(s) of "sweets"? To me, "sweets" could be hard candies, gummie bears, chocolate bonbons, petite fours, ... The sound each would make is quite different.
     
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    A swarm of excited mice wearing tiny Japanese geta sandals.
     
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    The OP did say hard boiled sweets, which are hard candies.
     
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    Thank you for clarifying that. "Hard boiled sweets" is a phrase I have never encountered in my almost 80 years on the west side of the great pond.

    So the sound is going to be something akin to a rattle, in my estimation.
     
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    My local dialect calls the “suck sweets” or “suck”, pronounced to rhyme with book or look. Usually used within the phrase “bagga suck”.

    “Ahm’a gooin’ dow-un Woolies forra bagga sook”
     

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