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    What is the last crappy sentence you wrote?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by StormbornT, Oct 12, 2019.

    I don't pretend to be the best writer, but I like to think I've been doing it long enough to avoid the common mistakes new ones make.

    Every so often, however, I'll look back on something I've recently written and it'll make me giggle. Thank god for editing.

    While working through my first edit I saw this sentence: Annoyed, I move to bump them back when I see a familiar halo of long blond hair masking two sharp green eyes that have just slid to me in amusement.

    I hadn't remembered even writing it (ended up scraping it completely as it did nothing for the scene, even with re-working), but it sure as heck humbled me for a second. I laughed for a good bit, thinking how much it read like a bad fanfic.

    Interested in knowing if anyone else has experienced a moment like this.
     
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    Have you not read anything of the fiction variety that I have
    written?
    Plenty of bad sentences to be had there. :p
     
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    Feel free to send it my way, lol.
     
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    I have a "laughs" file where I actually save all these little gems. I reread the file from time to time, maybe a few times a year, and always have a good giggle :D
     
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    Enough to make a grown man cry.
     
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