Isn't "Purrrow would look to an earth man" for the reader? And speaking of "again" wasn't "Her markings were what many males of her race thought were very pretty and the best of them just happened to not be covered by her uniform." for the reader? Edited to add: Wait. Is absolutely none of this going to be in the book? Have we been talking about what's in your notes? Edited again to add: Never mind. Good luck with this. I’m dropping off the thread.