I've finished with a tough piece of dialog between main character and protagonist. I'd like to get some other eyes on it, but it's a graphic novel script, not movie, so there's no action, only moments in time stills. It's part of a scifi graphic novel, but the scene isn't completely fleshed out. I tend to focus on dialog on first pass, then go back and work on scene details. So, I'm wanting to know if the dialog grabs people and gets them interested, while answering the questions of the main character and showing a change in him. Where should I go with this?
If it's a script (how does one write a graphic script?) or a novel, I'd put it in whichever one applies and just note at the top it is graphic novel.
Looks very similar to a movie script, but you describe the still scene, actions that have happened as opposed to actions happening. PAGE 1 The scene takes place aboard the Atlas (not yet named this) as it orbits Earth. DANTE has undergone surgery to install a cybernetic implant that's given him the memories and experiences of those who also carried the implant. However, as a common side-effect, the these memories are manifesting as personas of past Ro'shaan. BES is trying to quell the personas through Q&A. PANEL 1 Room: Space Large panel, shot from medium orbit above Earth. The Atlas passes over the sun lit South Pacific in a East to West equatorial orbit with Earth taking up the left half or so of the panel. Australia, New Guinea, Indonesia show through the dingy atmosphere of a polluted Earth. NOTE: BES and Dante, the new Ro'shaan, speak in the Consortium's interchange language, so all dialog between the two is in <>. BES (TAIL TO THE SHIP) <What do you remember?> DANTE (TAIL TO THE SHIP) <What am I supposed to remember?> BES (TAIL TO THE SHIP) <Do you remember your name?> PANEL 2 The Room: Inquisition Room. Rectangular with a sliding door to panel right and floor to ceiling one way mirror running the length of the wall in front of Dante, separating this room from the observation room. With the exception of the mirror and chair in the middle of the room, the area is bare of any distractions. Straight on shot, medium panel. DANTE rests his hands on the arms of the chair, leaning slightly forward and looking tense as if ready to jump to his feet and begin railing against the moment. His head and face are shaved clean and he's barefoot wearing silk lounge clothes with a tied wrap around tunic of a soothing, perhaps bland color, beige or off-white. BES traipses a circle around him, wearing similar clothes, her long red hair hanging thick and wavy to the middle of her back. He looks to his left where she was, but has since started to pass behind him going to his right. DANTE <I am Ro'shaan Kahl.> BES <No. That was a previous life. You are Ro'shaan Dante now.> (new bubble) <Do you remember the name of your world?> PANEL 3 Room: Observation room (there will be an observation lounge later, but this is a room). An observation room, long and narrow with one side entirely made of glass (or some similar transparent material used for the one-way mirror). Angled panels near the ceiling on the glass wall show vitals for Dante (heart rate, blood pressure, neural signals, etc). A sliding pneumatic door in the background (Stewart's right) allows entry. Medium panel, left side shot. Stewart stands in front of the window looking in. Her hair is tied up in a rear bun. STEWART What are you two saying? I don't understand the language. BES (NO TAIL) He believes he is a past Ro'shaan.
The closest area is going to be scripts. The format is not exactly the same, clearly, but it's as close as we come to dealing with graphic novels. I wonder why we don't have an area for graphics novels and comics...
