Judging by rhythm, coherence, and clarity, which of the following two sentence would you say is better? 1. When people ague with one another they cause many problems, but when they talk peacefully with one another they resolve them. 2. From the quarrels of men are born a multitude of problems, but the sharing of peaceful words supplies their end. I was recently reading a book called, "Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace". In that book, the author talks about matching characters with subjects, actions with verbs, and avoiding nominalizations, saying it is best to replace them using words like, "Because", "When", etc. If my understanding is correct, the first sentence I wrote follows these rules, but the second one I wrote violates them. I think that the second one is still valid, however, and has a rhythmical sound to it, unless my ear is mistaken. If this is the case, should I do my best to follows the rules in that book, or should I take liberty to break them? It seems that writing poetic prose requires that I break certain of the rules in style books. Is this why modern advice about writing often urges new writers to do their best to learn the rules, and then, once they have mastered them, to break them? I have not mastered the rules, but I think I have succeeded in following and breaking them here. What is your opinion, advice, etc on the matter?