No matter how much planning I do, or how well Ive thought about plot and characterization, my writing always seems very forced. When I write dialogue it doesn't seem as forced. This is a small piece from my latest story. Each step got harder, his pace beginning to slow down. Stumbling on the road, he sunk to his knees. His head ached excrutingly now, bringing him close to tears. He knew what was happening, and though he was powerless to stop it, he fought with everything he had left. He heard a car approach ahead of him. It slowed, and stopped directly infront of him, two doors slamming shut moments later. He heard footsteps approach him and managed to look up. The two men who stood above him grinned evily. He had been a while since Reuben had seen him, but he recognized him instantly. “Hello, Reuben.” said Cian. The dark energy finally overcame him, the last of his control finally succumbing to the force of the Darklands. Reluctantly, he let himself go, knowing there was nothing he could do to prevent was about to happen. Any suggestions on why it sounds forced and what I can do to adjust my writing style?