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    Contest Winner! Winner of Flash Fiction Contest #66 - Seven Crowns

    Discussion in 'Monthly Flash Fiction Contest' started by thirdwind, May 15, 2019.

    It was a close contest, but @Seven Crowns does it again! A big congrats! You can read the winning story here.

    @Wreybies, please crown the champ.
     
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    Congrats @Seven Crowns on your win. It was close but I really enjoyed your story.
     
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    Congrats again, Seven Crowns. Great work!
     
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    Thank you! I was trying to make a rustic voice without relying on dropped G's and "reckons." I wanted a sophisticated towny with a backwater grammar. Sometimes the language was elevated. Anyway, just trying to get a narrator's voice to drown out my own. Thinking about this afterward, I suspect I used a forgotten trope, and it wasn't that original of an idea. Seems like this would be an urban legend from the 1920's, fighting dead bodies in the ring. It seemed clever when I came up with it, but I'm sure it's been in its share of pulps. Sorry about that.

    I'll probably rewrite it anyway. I use a lot of these flashes for short story templates. What I do is memorize the words and all my favorite phrasings, and then type them again, expanding important sentences into their own paragraphs. That way it all comes out mostly new. Anything too stupid gets forgotten and only the strong survive. Not sure if the story's worth it with the trope . . . I guess I should research and see if I can find the same idea somewhere else.

    For some reason, lately I've been writing a lot of stories set in the 1920's. I think I'm just sick of the Internet, cell phones, and connected society. I miss yesterday.
     
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    Congratulations, Seven Crowns! The language was what blew me away: it sounded almost like poetry, the way rustic speech sometimes does.
     
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    As always: You are so/very good at this. Don't miss tomorrow or next contest!
     
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    Congratulations seven crowns. May you be crowned by whatever you dream of.:)
    Respects.
     
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