1. Davos Da Dudos

    Davos Da Dudos New Member

    Joined:
    Mar 7, 2017
    Messages:
    1
    Likes Received:
    0

    Physical statue

    Discussion in 'Character Development' started by Davos Da Dudos, Mar 14, 2017.

    Can you describe a characters physique e.g curvaceous muscular thighs, or the way someone walks e.g
    when she walk her bum cheeks jiggle with every step, or is that classed as sexist.
     
  2. Wreybies

    Wreybies Thrice Retired Supporter Contributor

    Joined:
    May 1, 2008
    Messages:
    23,826
    Likes Received:
    20,818
    Location:
    El Tembloroso Caribe
    Simpson17866 likes this.
  3. Lew

    Lew Contributor Contributor

    Joined:
    Sep 30, 2015
    Messages:
    1,667
    Likes Received:
    1,527
    Read "1984" to see where such self-censorship takes you. Say no to Crimespeak and Thoughtcrime.
     
    LostThePlot likes this.
  4. Iain Aschendale

    Iain Aschendale Lying, dog-faced pony Marine Supporter Contributor

    Joined:
    Feb 12, 2015
    Messages:
    18,851
    Likes Received:
    35,471
    Location:
    Face down in the dirt
    Currently Reading::
    Telemachus Sneezed
    Yup, if it's erotica, or she's a dancer or something, it's not only appropriate, but pretty necessary. A biography of, say, Eleanor Roosevelt, maybe not so much. ;)
     
  5. Simpson17866

    Simpson17866 Contributor Contributor

    Joined:
    Aug 23, 2013
    Messages:
    3,406
    Likes Received:
    2,931
    @Davos Da Dudos Welcome to the site!

    I am an asexual/aromantic virgin. A narrative from my POV would not describe the person in that way because I do not describe people that way.

    The narrator of my Urban Fantasy is a pig who thinks that he's an egalitarian because two of his best friends are women. The sexist language I use in his narrative is a judgement against his ability to empathize for describing the women that way, not a judgement against their value as human beings for being described that way by him.
     
    Last edited: Mar 15, 2017
    LostThePlot and Iain Aschendale like this.
  6. LostThePlot

    LostThePlot Naysmith Contributor

    Joined:
    Dec 31, 2015
    Messages:
    2,398
    Likes Received:
    2,026
    Totally agree. The question is not if you should it's what is it doing.

    Even to take a more mundane example than Simpson's; if you are describing someone who is a love interest then describing the parts of her that the other person finds attractive is actually important. If he really likes her bum then repeatedly mentioning it is showing us that this is the case without him having to tell us. Spending time describing her body shows us why he's throbbing in her direction and even really spending a lot of time on it is fine because, well, he's really paying attention to those details and it's important that we sympathize with him that she's sexy.

    It's only gratuitous (and hence icky) if it serves no purpose. As long as it informs something more than just her appearance then it's totally ok. Showing rather than tell is a good thing, so show us this stuff.

    I wrote a book about beauty pageants, which has a lesbian romance in it, and writing the MC staring at this other girl is important; transitioning from her just kinda checking out her competition to luxuriating in running her eye up this girls leg. And is that a bit pervy to leer over a teenager in the text? Sure, but the MC is the one who finds herself constantly thinking how gorgeous her soon to be girlfriend really is. The jump from her thinking the other girl is just pretty in an objective sense (they're all pretty) to slowly finding all the different ways that she's perfect shows us how her feelings are changing.
     
  7. JE Loddon

    JE Loddon Active Member

    Joined:
    Dec 8, 2016
    Messages:
    201
    Likes Received:
    161
    Location:
    South-East, UK
    I agree with what has already been said. If it is a character's point of view, then it is fine, as long as you want your character to have that point of view. If it's more of an omniscient narrator, why is he looking at the woman's thighs? Paint a picture of your character's, sure. They can be muscular. They can be athletic. If you feel the need to describe various body parts, though, ask yourself why. Ultimately, though, you're writing for your audience. If it's erotica, then it is expected. If you're writing for 'lads', then they'll probably appreciate the gratuitous descriptions. I'm not sure, though, that's the kind of behaviour we want to be reinforcing.
     

Share This Page

  1. This site uses cookies to help personalise content, tailor your experience and to keep you logged in if you register.
    By continuing to use this site, you are consenting to our use of cookies.
    Dismiss Notice