I'm writing a fantasy/sci-fi book which actively incorporates otherworldly magic and astronomical science... It's about a distant series of "space archipelagos" which float meaninglessly about the universe, protected by a fragile and precious atmosphere generated by magically charged shards of a planet's core. So, the whole world (called Nil) is unaware (or rather, the people of the archipelagos are unaware) of modern science, and the world is placed in a late - Medieval Age sort of time period, with more advances into general knowledge and the current time being a major turning point in Nil's history. A band of four heroes must discover Nil's beginning while trying to dethrone a hidden, corrupt secret society originally started from astronauts from what is now "future" Earth. The astronauts, at first amazed by the whole new world, were suddenly swept up with dreams of guiding this new world into a perfect world, without the mistakes of Earth. Their obsession with making a perfect world soon turned to corrupt madness, and they eventually became (I really hate to use this term) mad spacemen. The four heroes are each emotionally different - the one I'm talking about is The Abbot. The Abbot is a very shadowy character, the last of the heroes to be introduced. He does not talk much, but when he does, he has a bit of an Irish or Scottish lilt or brogue - very slight. I based him loosely on Albus Dumbledore from Harry Potter by J.K. Rowling, but more mysterious. While Dumbledore may be mysterious and a closed book himself, the Abbot has absolutely nothing known about himself published to his comrades and even when having emotionally revealing talks with his three fellows does not reveal much. The Abbot wears a hood and cloak all the time, revealing a slightly crooked chin and a long, bent nose. The rest of his face is covered by the shadows of his hood and his head is always pointed at the ground. His cloak is very tattered, and he wears a Scottish-like brooch upon his clothes. Later in the story, The Abbot is shown to have very special abilities - he is one of the few in Nil that can use magic. He can guide the thin life essence of magic that act like threads in the air and tell them what to do - and they follow him, obedient but very held back, as they can be extremely powerful. For instance, he could simply create an insanely overpowered fireball out of the essence, but he could also harness a huge ball of water, constantly folding in on itself and crashing in on itself. He can also "teleport", taking others with him as he fades into oblivion, and folds his way through spacetime to eventually walk into his destination (more on this in a future post). He is also very knowledgeable, sometimes participating in discussions with the other brainiac of the group, who is openly smart and very analytical. The Abbot appears to know more about Nil than all of the people of Nil put together, and seems to have a goal of unmasking the leader of the corrupt society and showing him to the world of Nil. So, I'm not sure how this character would work out in comparison to other heroes, but I feel he is much needed and brings a balance to the group. I am imagining one scene where the foursome are arguing on a road where to go, and it gets very heated. There is pushing, shoving, the brainiac is sitting on a tree stump imagining that the argument isn't happening, and the other two are yelling (I am fully aware this is a run-on sentence). Suddenly, The Abbot appears out of nowhere, and his shadowy presence is enough to stop everyone from yelling and arguing. Everything is silent, and he speaks in a very quiet but discernable voice. And then the rest of the scene is undisclosed Anyway, that's my character. I hope some of you will be able to evaluate him to see if he is balanced. Thanks!