So, I know everyone has their own style and everything, but something about my own writing that bugs me is this - I write so much inner dialogue. I don't get too into writing about the personality or background, but I write out all of their thoughts, and I know that most of these things are irrelevant to what I'm really trying to say with the story. I realize that I need to incorporate more action, but I'm not sure how to do change this habit. Also, I tend to write obvious questions that are sort of pointless. Should I worry too much about changing the habit, or just focus on writing what I can? Right now, I'm just trying to get some sort of story, I don't care about it being good or perfect, but I don't want it to be completely mangled. Here's an example: But that could be a long way away. Who knows what would happen. The sun was , and the villagers were smiling, and the children laughed, the water looked calm and still. But what happens when the sun goes down, and the darkness fell over the town? Patrolmen stood high on walls around the village, and scouts explored the area surrounding the village for signs of danger. But, how much caution was too much caution? How much was just enough? When she was younger, much younger, she remembered having a brother. The memory of his face was faint, but one incident, she remembered clearly. The adults of their village were worried about something, and the two of them didn’t understand much, but she remembered the fear in his eyes. “big sis, what do you think is going to happen to us?” “I don’t know. But I think if we sit on the peaceful shore and pray, that we will be protected. There are gods and spirits to protect those who believe in them,” she had said. She felt so wise in that moment, even though she was a child. It felt good to comfort him. The next day, the tsunami had engulfed the village, and she thought bitterly on that day. The gods hadn’t protected them. To her, it was a betrayal…a betrayal she still lived with today. Even as a priestess-in-training, she couldn’t forget.