Hi guys, I was reading The Walking Dead, and something that stuck out to me was that they nearly always describe their clothes to describe their profession before they became the undead. And I think they also wondered about who they used to be. I realized that pretty much every description of my zombies is their zombie description. Intestines hanging out like noodles, eyes tinted with yellow, rotting teeth, skin hanging off their face, etc. Yet my main female character is quite empathetic, still seeing them as people. She struggles to kill them, finally it takes her causing the other guy with her to get bitten that she starts getting over this. But I realized that describing them as I did above doesn't really fit a story theme of humanity. A character should be feeling sorry for them. So I'm thinking I need to go through and rewrite a lot of my zombie descriptions (in slow paced sections) better. This will also add to the characterization of my two main characters. An example that I wrote last night is A white apron clung to its round belly (zombie inside a diner, subtly tells you that he's the chef or cook). And earlier in the same scene The uniform was covered in a layer of filth. A mixture of bile, vomit and blood. Behind the filth they could read the El Machino logo embroidered in the top right. Those two examples don't add to the characterization as I already had a dialog scene earlier where the two main characters were talking about Jackie from the El Machino franchise in their hometown. Reminiscing over the food they served. These two small descriptions I feel add more detail (realistic detail) to really bring the scene to life. Before this they discussed trying to get into the El Machino diner, so the second one would have been better than saying. A zombie was tearing plastic bags open in the garbage bin. Rubbish spewed out over the concrete. That just makes the zombie feel like an object or an obstacle. Whereas my characters do what has to be done, but they feel remorse for it. They feel sorry for these people. What do you think? Is this better? Obviously where it's appropriate I will add characterization details. If I hadn't had the dialog about El Machino's I could have written The uniform was covered in a layer of filth. A mixture of bile, vomit and blood. Behind the filth they could read the El Machino logo embroidered in the top right. Clair sighed. What she wouldn't give for just one slice of their famous meatloaf. Maybe they would still have the ingredients. She scoffed. What would she know about cooking? Her mother had always taught her that she was above cooking. Their chef would always maker dinners, although he would often teach her some tricks when her Mother wasn't around. So I can take that visual description and work on the characterization. What I wrote above is essentially a remake of what happened in the dialog. Thanks heaps!