Editing for "Proxy Soldier" continues, a Cyberpunk Military Novel This journal will help me keep track of the ideas and thoughts of Alpha and Beta readers on my book. The work is complete at this point, and any changes will be seriously considered, and minor. Current editing methods: Alpha reads continue, and Beta reads have begun. With the manuscript existing as a proper book, I will wait for Alpha and Beta readers to finish, to get impressions on the work as a whole. Goals of Alpha reads: -Get open, first impressions of my story. -Get open, first impressions of my 'style'. Goals of Beta read#1: -Find out if the characters are interesting. -Find out if the plot is too obvious. COMPLETE: Current editing methods: Alpha Reads, and The Oral Edit. With the entire manuscript complete, I will read the story out-loud to myself and take notes. Goals of Alpha Reads: -Get open, first impressions of my story. -Get open, first impressions of my 'style'. Goals of Oral Edit: -Note any places where the phrasing causes me to stumble, the wording feels confusing or out of place, or my mind seems to wander from the text. -Record how long each chapter takes to actually read. -Ensure the theme of the story is present in the text, as opposed to simply in my mind. -Continue to check for spelling and grammar issues, and setting, character, plot inconsistencies. Manuscript Wordcount: 94,718 Words Edited: Words Cut: New Critique Notes +My 'war story' reads like a 'war story'. +Interesting Characters. -Linebreaks lack style. They need to drive/separate/enhance the action. -Technobabble is still present. I need to explain what things are in a more clear manner. General Notes: I have two Alpha readers as of writing this. Their notes on the first chapter have already given me a wealth of knowledge and insight into the limitations and strength of both my story, and my writing 'style'. ------------------------------------------------------------ COMPLETE Current editing method: The Close-In Edit. With the entire first draft complete I will go through the manuscript from beginning-to-end for a complete rewrite. Goals of Close-In Edit: -Correct all spelling and grammar issues. -Check for and plug any major plot holes. -Check that all scenes are required to present the story, editing or adding as necessary. -Ensure the three main point-of-view characters properly present their ideas, their three voices conveying the themes of the story. -Ensure all setting information is consistent within the universe. 1st Draft Word Count 183,465 Remaining Word Count: 69,073 Edited Words: 119,845 2nd Draft Word Count: 94,718 Words Edited: 5,294 Words Cut: 1,171 Critique notes: +I possess some technical skill, and am capable of constructing competent narrative arcs. +I can write action scenes that make sense, with some described as easy to follow +I am good at building tension, both with action and narrative. +My ideas and concepts are creative. -I am poor at establishing settings. I need to ensure the background is set before just getting into the action. -I insert needless "stage direction" during dialog. I need to let the characters just talk. -I overuse technical jargon, such as military lingo or scientific babble. I need to ensure ideas are conveyed simply. -Copulative writing. I need to rely less on weak, conjoined verbs. -Far too many 'was' words. Direct action is better than saying someone 'was about to do something.' -I use pedestrian dialog. I need to make sure secondary characters only speak if I need to establish them in a scene, I am trying to layer on their personality, or they actually do something. General Notes: I developed and adhered to a planned story framework, and the draft is divided into approximately 34 chapters of 3000-5000 words each. I wrote this draft without spellcheck, grammarcheck, or wordcount, transcribing every bit of story and idea I could into the narrative. I expect to edit out a lot of fluff and redundancy.