Some bastard in my head has just pointed out that my two characters come across as very immature, and that this along with the first-person narrative will only serve to reinforce presumptions it's aimed at the YA market.
Strangest thing just occurred! I read a few lines from a first-person novel for inspiration. The book is also written in present tense. When I sat down with my WiP I started typing and automatically wrote an entire sentence in present tense before I noticed what I was doing
Chapter 2 finished. Only 90 more to go (they're short chapters).
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