She Walks Forward

By Unit7 · Jul 3, 2010 · 519 · 4
  1. Today I was bored and I had this line stuck and felt inspired to do something with it. I thought of doing a small paragraph or two on it. Then I thought, why not make a poem of sorts?

    She waits down by the water.
    As the ocean sweeps past her feet
    she looks down,
    and wonders many things.
    She lifts her head to see
    the truth that never was

    Slowly she walks forward
    she can feel the cold ocean
    biting at her skin
    She walks forward
    and as the water rises
    she wonders something
    She can taste the salty water now
    she spits it up
    so she can walk forward some more
    deeper and deeper she walks
    until she can't breathe anymore
    and then she walks forward anyways


    Its very rough I know. I just wrote one line after another. It wasn't until I was done and the title had gone from 'She Waits Down By the Water' to 'She Walks Forward' did I realize what I had unintentionally done. The Ocean represents Life. Life is an untamed beast and it can be cruel. She walks forward even though her life feels overwhelming and can't breathe.

    So I guess roughly it's all about moving forward in life. Or something.

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  1. TerraIncognita
    I really liked it a lot. I'm not a poet but I liked it. It's definitely something I (and many others) can relate to. When life gets overwhelming it does feel like you are drowning but you know you have to keep moving forward anyways.
    TerraIncognita, Jul 4, 2010
  2. Unit7
    Not much of a poet myself. Aside from a few acrostic poems about a month ago, I haven't really tried to write a poem since I had to in school.

    But I am glad you liked it. :)
    Unit7, Jul 4, 2010
  3. TerraIncognita
    I haven't written any poetry since I was forced to in school. I don't have anything against it.. it's just not my thing. I'm too damn verbose. :rolleyes: Cool. :)
    TerraIncognita, Jul 5, 2010
  4. Pallas
    It is strange, the part of entering the water felt like a suicide on the first time through, but as you explained, I see how it can seen as perseverance as well. I would probably change the "anyways" to "still". Nice one.
    Pallas, Jul 5, 2010
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