I'm aware. I had to submit a big assignment yesterday and I couldn't even manage that! I had to get an extension. But it's mostly finished (just needs a few final touches). I plan to make today a writing day and just focus on my post. On the plus side, there is 1.5 more months of this and I'll be free from academic duties until October!
I'm on it! I'm just going out for dinner right now, but should have some time tomorrow to get it started.
Hey, would people be okay if I invited another member to join the story? Or do you think it's a closed deal at the moment?
No problem with me either. Also, I was thinking of creating a map of the country. I think it would really help if we all had an idea of what the world "looks" like. I'll be deciding the country name, region names, and everything else. Is everyone okay with that? We can always change it if something isn't liked.
Just posted my new entry! I came home from my dinner out and started on it, and could not leave it. A note - I'd like to see Katara have inherited some of her father's deviousness!
I really loved your post, @Louanne Learning. You're shaping Gamma into quite the character and I seriously love the way you've involved her so far. Two important notes: It's not in the queen's intention to stop time. This is a side effect of her removing some very important pieces from the environment. I don't think Olive is quite ready yet for anything too big. I plan on kick-starting her development with an important scene in my next post. This isn't really your fault. It's more like mine. I am being intentionally vague about the queen's plans because I want it to be a surprise. Because yes, she has some very big plans, and I know what those are. But you're very much on the right track with Olive. I actually had a similar idea. No spoilers but Gamma will be involved with Olive extensively. I think it was you who initially introduced that with Bossman in the forest. It's certainly a splendid idea! Olive is an atypical mage who requires an atypical person to teach her. Thanks so much for that. Your post needs some edits but since it's yours I'll let you decide on those.
I'm very happy that my random choice to write a scene from Arespeth's perspective led to such great scenes!
Good post @Louanne Learning. I have some edits to suggest. I don't think Ravenna could be in the next scene as she's bound to experience backlash from using magic. So, I figure she would be in bed recovering, rather then on her feet. I figure Ravenna would pass out after using magic and be chilled and feverish for a bit. Maybe you could salvage the scene by moving it forward a few days? I don't know. But I wanted to request this edit.
That's an easy fix. Ravenna can experience the effects of the recoil a bit later. It's your turn now so there is an opportunity to do that. I mean, this does happen in real life as well. You can receive damage and feel the effects much later. I quite liked that scene because Katara barely gets any screen time. This scene was quite an interesting insight to her character. Not that I have any say in this, just suggesting...
Okay, that does work. So please disregard my edits. I think having a recoil later could be really interesting and might be my next post. Thanks so much for the easy fix. I wonder though what could trigger the reaction.
But, it was the next day? How about if I have her collapsing and fainting at the laundry cauldron? This is very true. The effects of any shock are often delayed. For the first little while, Ravenna can be running on adrenalin.
Louanne already suggested adrenaline. Adrenaline is amazing at suppressing symptoms. You won't feel a thing until it starts to run out. Another potential explanation: She got tissue damage from the recoil but inflammation (histamine, I think) didn't hit until a day later. That does happen in real life. Have you ever injured something, only for it to be really sore and painful the next day? That, but across her whole body at an intensity of your choosing.
