Hi all! I started to like the writing, especially the "show don't tell" bit Can you tell me if this is a bit how it works and if/how it can improve? Ryd stayed silent. Her eyes fell on a large building, where the flickering of the lights inside was perfectly reflected by the shards of broken glass laying in front of it. Shelves were toppled inside, accompanied only by broken bottles and torn bags that used to hold food. Normally vibrant in color and lively in sound. Now the only color striking her eyes was the red of blood, laying in puddles on the floor. Now the only sounds being those of painful silence.
You need to establish what you mean by "show don't tell". For some people it means writing descriptively and evocatively; for others it means giving the readers enough information to make a conclusion but not actually spelling out what conclusion you want them to reach. For your piece - I think it's a good start at the descriptive and evocative version of "show" - it could use some polishing, but I think the essential elements are there.
All I know is that I should explain what catches the senses of the character as much as possible, instead of just saying she is looking at a ruined supermarket Besides that I am just a monkey slamming on a keyboard What kind of polishing do you think I could use? It would help me to improve my writing
