Ok, I haven't written here for a few years. While editing my book I found two problems with the dialogs. "They're over there," he shouted. He saw two young boys blah blah or "They're over there," he shouted. He saw two young boys blah blah
Wouldn't a person usually have to see a person/people before pointing them out? Personally I'd go with something more like this: Also, I'd replace the first "he" with the character's name. Hope that helps.
