1. Samlon

    Samlon New Member

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    How would you edit this (long) sentence?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Samlon, Oct 29, 2017.

    The most common example of an antagonistic pair is in the upper arm, the biceps and triceps; The triceps relaxes while the biceps contracts to bring the forearm towards the humerus; the insertion point towards the origin.
     
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    The most common example of an antagonistic pair is in the upper arm: the biceps and triceps. The triceps relaxes while the biceps contracts to bring the forearm towards the humerus.​

    I'm unclear on the point of that last clause so I just snipped it. You should probably do some reading on what semicolons are for.
     
  3. Samlon

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    In this case the forearm is the insertion point and the humerus is the origin. The purpose of the last clause was to clarify that.

    I do have trouble understanding how to use semicolons, and normally I try to avoid them. Me wanting to use them in this sentence is the main reason for why I came here with it - it made me uncertain. Where do you suggest I go to learn this?
     
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    I see. I'd work that in like this:

    The most common example of an antagonistic pair is in the upper arm: the biceps and triceps. The triceps relaxes while the biceps contracts to brinkg the forearm (the insertion point) towards the humerus (the origin).​

    Honestly, if you don't now how to use something, I don't think the solution is to just plunge ahead and use it anyway. I don't have any particular source for learning grammar stuff - it really depends on what you're having a hard time grasping when it comes to what will get through to you. But I know a lot of people like Grammarly and Grammar Girl, and The Oatmeal is always good for a humorous spin on things. Maybe one of those will help.
     
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    I like the way you re-structured that, I might use it. Thanks.

    I didn't intend on using the sentence in that way without first gaining more knowledge about the things I was using in it. Hence why I came here.

    I'll check those out, thanks again for the help.
     
  6. IDontDrinkKoolaid

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    The way I see it is that a semicolon is like a period which retains context.

    Like: "The room was dark and damp; spooky, but she could handle it."

    I often use them to separate sentences where many periods or commas would become confusing, or when I find the sentence sounds better without a more traditional connector.

    Edit: I forgot to mention: never EVER capitalize after a semicolon, the Grinch will eat you in your sleep.
     
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    The words after the semicolon have to be a complete sentence/independent clause. This would be correct if it were, for example:

    The room was dark and damp; it was spooky, but she could handle it.
     
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