its a scene where the female is picking apples on a tree and she falls down, and the male was supposed to be holding the ladder down, but she falls and crashes on top of the male who loses his balance. how do i write this?
This is the support and feedback forum related to questions about this website. @Homer Potvin - can we move it? In answer to your question - this depends on so much! What is the relationship between the man and the woman? What do you want to happen between them? What do you want to signify with this scene?
Very good points. *nod* Another thing we need to consider: whose POV (point-of-view) are we in? The woman's? The man's? (The tree's, if this is a fantasy?) Or do we see the scene from behind a camera lens? These details matter. If we're in the woman's POV, we can 'hear' her thoughts as she plummets to earth. (If you're going for a comic scene, these thoughts might be: "Aaahhh, I hope I wore clean underwear otherwise I would die and everyone would see my dirty underwear and I would die of shame, Aaahhh" etc. If you're going for a dramatic scene, of course these thoughts would be different). If we're in the man's POV, we can 'hear' his thoughts, e.g. "Oh no! I'd better move so I can catch -- oof!" etc. If the POV is the camera, we can't hear either thoughts. All we can do is document what's happening. More details, please!
If I had that thought to go on, I might try writing the scene from all three POV's and see which resonates with you more. One of them may 'feel' better to your sensibilities. Then you can go from there. As Rath and Louanne said though, you need to have the starting point of their relationship status. The POV's will branch from whatever that is.
