While you're right that run-on sentences can be a problem, your example is actually a well-formed -- though perhaps overly long -- sentence it is...
I'd just like to suggest, along with the other excellent recommendations above, to not let this problem impact you during your first draft writing...
Another solution: write fantasy set in a world you've built.... :D Barring that, which details of a locale matter least? - the actual...
LOL I guess it could also be called "fulfilling contractual obligations"....
@afrodite7 - thank you for summing that up very nicely. Case closed (AFAIC). :) Absolutely right. It boils down to the difference between...
Bravo to Complex for fully clarifying what could be a tricky sticking point. NovemberRose, if you expect to attempt to publish your novel,...
I wouldn't worry about being an "odd duck out". You can learn and grow from many different kinds of experiments. And the odder experiments can...
Good idea - but you may need to get used to the fact that the starting over will be with a different person. Watch the old patterns as they...
Thank you BFGuru, JessWrite and D-Doc for adding to a great list of suggestions. The Redwall series was suggested to me elsewhere as well - we'll...
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