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    Animation Pitch Redone

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by MilesTro, Dec 28, 2007.

    I decided to rewrite the characters and the stories in this pitch to make it sound better. What do you think?



    CONCEPT

    A hybrid human dog bounty hunter leads his two companions on a quest to catch criminals for money and other rewards. They are known as The Play Dogs.

    In this future of high tech computers, advance genetic engineering, and solar power vehicles, humans coexist with a race of genetically created human animal hybrids, known as Paras (which is short for Parahumans).

    The enemies are not just your typical today criminals. Many are rogue mutants, evil cyborgs, mad scientists, renegade clones, corrupt corporations, bio terrorists, mobsters, thieves, and many more you could name. They all have a price on their heads, and it is up to the best professional bounty hunters for hire to bring them to justice. Many of these thugs want money; desire to steal genetic products, and other important stuff, which could bring a threat to the peace of the people. The Play Dogs must stop them or something terrible will happen.

    The Play Dogs is a mix of action, science fiction, comedy, and adventure with character driven stories and the awareness of how genetic engineering could affect the community around the world.



    IMAGINE. . .

    You are a new bounty hunter in the world of The Play Dogs. So what criminals you must catch to earn your rewards?

    You are chasing a bio terrorist, who is carrying a device, which will unleash a deadly virus upon the people in the city. The terrorist enters a dark warehouse and then locked you outside. When you busted the door open, you enter the warehouse cautiously. Suddenly the door closed, and then the lights flashed on. A group of thugs, who are the bio terrorist’s companions, surrounded you as they are pointing their laser guns at you. How will you get pass these thugs and catch the bio terrorist before he releases the virus?

    Your client sent you an e-mail of an offer to catch a scientist, who is smuggling muscle enhancement drugs to gangsters. The scientist is located inside a lab facility guarded by tight security. Your client wants you to catch the scientist without being detected by the corporation’s security or the scientist will escape. Can you reach the scientist without getting detected?

    You go underground inside a sewer tunnel to hunt down an escaped prisoner. But you encounter flesh eating mutant rats, who desire your taste. Can you get pass these monsters and find the prisoner hiding underground?












    SETTING

    The year is 2503 A.D, taking place in a futuristic technological cyberpunk world. There are solar powered cars, hover aircrafts, space shuttles, computers, genetic labs, etc. And everything runs on solar power, because the energy is easy to receive from the sun.
    Since 2100 A.D, genetic engineering became the most advance science on Earth. Scientists wanted to make people healthy and perfect for a better life. And genetic engineering became a solution to the people’s problems.
    By the time the scientists were able to combine human and animal DNA together, they were able to create hybrid embryos for medical research, thus creating the Para beings.
    The first Paras were used only as experiments to advance medical treatment; sought as organ transplants, gene transplants, and blood transplants.
    The Paras started to develop a dramatic need to find another purpose than being medical experiments for the humans. After escaping, they began a revolution against the humans.
    In order to end this civil war between humans and Paras, the president of the United States gave equal rights and freedom to the Para communities. The Paras became civilians in America, but not everybody thought of them as people.
    As technology grew, so did crime. New types of criminals like cyborgs, Paras, mutants, and clones started to harm many people including the Para community.
    The law enforcement system had to update their forces in order to stop these new threats. They built new weapons, new vehicles, and made new methods of catching dangerous criminals. Because of their improved security and enforcement, many criminals now went into hiding to avoid getting caught. That is why many bounty hunters are being hired in this world. Crime began to slow down, but it never stopped happening.







    THE MAIN CHARACTERS

    SPINYN

    He is a young Para hybrid cheetah dog. About 5’9 and 20 years of age. Has yellow spotted fur and yellow eyes.
    He is a team leader of his friends on bounty missions. His job is to find criminals and bring them in. He loves dangerous action pack quests, hot girls, and mostly fish tacos.
    Spinyn is a hot shot comedian. An intelligent trickster, who loves to play jokes on his enemies. He is silly, but he keeps his cool.
    He doesn’t like boring stuff and being tricked back. He will get angry if somebody else makes him look like a fool. His flaw is falling for girls and falling for his own tricks.
    Spinyn was created by Dr. Wiser as a purpose to be Dr. Wiser’s son. Not knowing why he was actually created, Spinyn grew the desire to become a crime fighter after watching dozens of action movies. He wanted to become a hero and earn fame and fortune. This is what drives him into becoming a well trained bounty hunter.



















    LISSY

    She is a Japanese Para fox full of beauty. She is 5’7 and 18 years old. Has pink fur, and short red hair. Her eyes are ruby red.
    Lissy is a navigator type of team member. She does all the mapping directions and tells Spinyn and Tooth where to go. She is very good at keeping her team from getting lost, while tracking a suspect.
    She is cute, but she has a short temper. Whenever something goes wrong or she falls for a prank, Lissy will blow up like a volcano. She can be a violent monster or a calm sweetheart.
    Lissy doesn’t like to be tricked in a humorous way, or proven to be wrong. She will lose her violent temper if she ever falls for a joke. Her biggest flaw is falling for tricks.
    Lissy grew up in Tokyo Japan, until her family brought her to America to escape racism in the city. She graduated from law school and learned how to navigate to catch a criminal. Knowing she isn’t good by herself, she teamed with Spinyn and Tooth to catch bad guys. Her quest is to end racism and enforce peace between humans and Paras.



















    TOOTH

    He is a buff muscular dog man boxer, who wears two red boxing gloves for combat. He is 5’11, 23 years old, has brown fur, brown eyes, and a red Mohawk.
    Tooth is a brute supporter of the team. He has super strength, which he uses to fight criminals. He loves fighting and showing off his strength.
    Tooth is a muscle show off, but serious to people. He likes to work out a lot to keep in shape. He always worries how strong he is to make sure he is stronger than others.
    He doesn’t like other macho men, who are stronger than him. Seeing stronger men makes him feel weak and embarrassed. If he encounters another body builder, he will try to prove he is better. Getting stronger is very important to him so he wouldn’t feel ashamed to himself. His flaw is losing his temper.
    Tooth was raised by a crime lord to be a cage fighter for gambling. After being mistreated too much, Tooth turned against his master and then escaped on a quest to find sanctuary. Dr. Wiser soon found on a street and decided to give him a home. Because the way Tooth was treated, he grew a desire to help others who are being mistreated too. Thus he became a crime fighting bounty hunter with Spinyn.










    J.J

    He is a Para white rabbit in his mid 20’s. He has a lean body, 5’6, white fur, and blue eyes.
    J.J is The Play Dog’s computer tech specialist and mechanic engineer. He sells them gadgets, repair their vehicles, and solve their computer problems. Because they pay him very well with their share reward, J.J became willing to help them on their missions.
    He is very pleasant and cheerful, but he can talk too much. His mouth is like a motor. It takes a lot of courage to tell him to stop, without hurting his feelings.






    DR.WISER

    He is an old man in his early 70’s. He is 4’3, has wrinkly peach skin, skinny body, and gray eyes. He usually wears glasses to cover his eyes.
    Dr. Wiser is a retired genetic scientist from the Victor Corp. He is now a hired scientist, who helps other genetic researchers with their problems.
    He raised Spinyn as his son, because Dr. Wiser wanted to be a loving father. Plus he knew Spinyn was supposed to become what Dr. Wiser doesn’t want Spinyn to become.
    Dr. Wiser is a brilliant and kind person. He is a good get to know person to people. And he is very passionate to his research.









    RIVALS



    LENG

    He is a Para boarder collie. He is in his 20’s as well as his comrades. He is 5’10 with an athletic muscular body, black and white fur, and blue eyes.
    Leng and his gang are bounty hunters, who don’t care who they catch; innocence or guilty. All he cares about is getting his reward and winning the competition. And he will do anything to catch a criminal before any other crime fighter does.
    He is a bully and hard headed. His goal is to become the most top ranked bounty hunter in the world.





    OQUKER

    He is a fat Para pig with a very large stomach. He is 6’3 with peach skin and a bald head.
    Oquker is a brute among his companions. His stomach is his iron fist. He uses his stomach to slam and smash stuff. He also has super strength, which makes him the worst enemy to Tooth. His flaw is food. If he finds food during a fight, he will get distracted.
    He is a typical pig, who likes to eat a lot of junk food for himself. Even though Oquker is a dumb greedy eater, he is tough to beat.




    SNIK

    He is a Para hyena. He is 5’6, slender, and has gray spotted fur. He has dark eyes and sharp fangs.
    Snik is a weapon specialist. He pulls out random weapons out of nowhere and shoots like crazy.
    He doesn’t laugh a lot like a typical hyena, but he plays crude humor against his enemies. He loves weapons and has the need to shoot something.
    Snik is a hot shot type. He thinks he is cool, but he can make a lot of mistakes. He also has a secret crush on Lissy, even though she doesn’t like him. Snik only knows the knowledge on how to wipe out something. And he is cautious of not killing a bounty.


















    MAIN VILLAIN

    KING GOTH

    He is The Play Dog’s worst enemy. He is a Para gorilla about 6’5 in his mid 60’s. He has dark fur, black afro, and gray eyes. His favorite fashion is wearing expense business suits.
    King Goth is a rich and powerful mob leader of a gang, called The Chinese Kongs. He makes profit of operating a black market system, which is unknown to the law enforcement system. He sells chemical weapons and illegal biological warfare devices to bio terrorists. He also supports criminals in activities if they could pay him back. So rich and dangerous, he could almost get away with anything as long as he is undetected from the police.
    He is a calm gentleman, who behaves very nice to people and enemies. When temper, he becomes a raging gorilla. King Goth is one of the most dangerous crime leaders on Earth.













    TPD EQUIPMENT


    THE CUBE: A prime tool use to catch criminals. How it works the bounty hunter throws the Cube at the target. When it opens near the target, it unleashes a flash of light, which breaks down the target’s atoms and molecules into pieces. Then it sucks the target into a pocket dimensional space inside the box.
    This criminal trapper is safe and easier to use to catch a crook. It works within minutes, sucking the criminal into another dimension inside the Cube. It can suck one or three targets at the same time.
    The Cube is white the size of a ring box. The bounty hunter has to stand away from the Cube, or he or she will get suck in too.

    MORPH GUN: This is a main weapon, which The Play Dogs use to defend themselves. Since bounty hunters are not allowed to kill their targets, they use this gun to turn their enemies into harmless animals instead.
    The gun blasts a light beam, which breaks down the target’s atoms and molecules. Then it reconstructs the target into an animal form within one second. The gun will need a DNA sample from an animal to know what type of animal the target should become.
    There are different types of Morph guns; pistol, sniper rifle, machine gun, etc. It can fire about a hundred shots, until it has to be recharge for two hours. It all takes one shot to turn an enemy into an animal. The Play Dogs mostly turn their enemies into chickens with their Morph guns.










    STORY LINE SERIES

    Series One: Spinyn receives news that his human father, Dr. Wiser, have mysteriously disappear on the terra formed moon, Lunar. He was supposed to deliver a top secret packet to a genetic company, but he never arrived. Spinyn and his friends took a trip to the moon to investigate Dr. Wiser’s abduction. Whoever took him must be after the company’s secret experiment.

    Series Two: An owner of Victor Corp, named Mr. Victor, offered Spinyn a billion dollar reward to catch a run away cyborg experiment. The Play Dogs travel to Africa to find the target so they can get the reward for themselves. But they are not the only ones interested in the reward. Leng, Snik, Oquker, and other bounty hunters are on the hunt too. The entire mission soon becomes a battling competition.

    Series Three: Spinyn becomes a wanted criminal after reports of a burglar robbing genetic labs, who look like him. While hiding from the police and bounty hunters, Spinyn must find the imposter and bring him to justice. The only people he can trust are his friends and his father.

    Series Four: After catching Spinyn’s evil clone, Lissy and Tooth were able to prove Spinyn is innocence. Now they must enter a prison inter dimensional world to rescue Spinyn. In this world, they must battle pass insane criminals, who want revenge. And Spinyn could be in trouble.

    Series Five: King Goth and a group of bio terrorist place the world under hostage. Their plan is to receive a huge ransom, or they will unleash a deadly plague across the world. Spinyn and his friends join together to try to stop these criminal before the world might come to an end.
     
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    What age group is this aimed at?
     
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    I guess around ten and up.
     
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    I'm only a fan of animation, so my opinion is not really worth much, but I think Play Dogs is a rather dumb name, especially if they're a sort of crime fighting organization.

    Affect in what way? Don't you think that's a bit too complicated for a ten-year old? I think you're trying to mix a bunch of stuff that sounds good together and it's not really working, or at least not for a kids show, if it was for an older age group it could work with a lot of revamping.

    Like I said, I'm not expert in the matter so my opinion is just that, an opinion.
     
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    Well that's your opinion.
     
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    How about they are called Skull Hunters. And if they aim at teenagers, what channel should they be on?
     

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