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    Are these sentences correct?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Forgetmenot77, Mar 29, 2010.

    The wave caught me as I turned to face it and it was too late. The wave hit me head on then I lost my sense of direction. I felt sandy bottom and regained my direction and quickly swam upwards.
     
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    way too many 'and's... not good writing, though only two grammatical errors...

    2 sentences stuck together... either separate them, or rewrite to make sense as one...

    makes no sense without an article ['a' or 'the']...

    better would be:
    hope that helps... love and hugs, maia
     
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    forgot about...

    using but in the sentence to unite it. Thank you.
     
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    just using 'but' would not have done much good, the way you had all the rest worded... but yes, the conjunction is a handy item for tying two related things together in a sentence...
     

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