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  1. lameri

    lameri Senior Member

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    dash or something else?

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by lameri, Apr 26, 2011.

    I don’t remember the food we ate, but I do remember the light–the faint rays of January afternoon sunlight.

    (Would a comma, instead of the dash, be better?)
     
  2. Youniquee

    Youniquee (◡‿◡✿) Contributor

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    I don’t remember the food we ate, but I do remember the light–the faint rays of January afternoon sunlight.

    I don't know why, but that doesn't sound right to me...Why not just say 'but I do remember the the faint rays of the January afternoon sunlight.'
    I know you weren't asking for that, but I thought i'd put it out there xD
     
  3. Leonardo Pisano

    Leonardo Pisano Active Member

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    Use an 'em dash' if you want the reader to take a long pause -- this is appropriate here imho.
     
  4. mammamaia

    mammamaia nit-picker-in-chief Contributor

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    -- is only used in a ms, to show that an em dash is wanted there... if it's not for a ms, the actual dash should be used...

    that said, i'd use a comma there, not a dash...
     
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    digitig Contributing Member Contributor

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    Better for what? Either would be fine but the resulting pacing of the sentence would be different. It's a question of how you want to pace that sentence in the context of all of the other sentences around. For the sentence in isolation, I prefer the em-dash. More wistful.
     

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