I've heard the popular logic: If you write from the character's perspective "She noticed that something happened," instead of just "Something happened," then publishers will feel that you're distancing your reader from the audience, that you should cut out the extra descriptors so that readers can feel that it's happening to them instead of reminding them that it's happening to somebody else (letting them be the character instead of just watching the character) and it makes sense in the abstract. It's just that when I try to actually write something, I generally end up feeling the exact opposite: that only ever saying "Something happened" means that the narrator is taking the reader out of the character-limited perspective to simply Tell facts about the story (which are then assumed to be objective) instead of Showing that we are still in the character's POV and that the character is experiencing the story in real time (and who is possibly missing key pieces that will come back to haunt her later). It's easy for me to cut filters most of the time - once I've used a "She noticed that something happened" in one sentence, then I can easily cut the filters out of the next few sentences; the "Something happened" sentences still feel like extensions of the same POV as the first sentence - but I'm still having trouble cutting out all of them in such a way that the stories still flow naturally for me. Again, I understand in the abstract that if I want my stories to be published, then I need to make compromises based on what the publishers would want, but that doesn't seem to be helping me with the actual task of editing them all out. Does anybody here have tips for breaking the thought process that's getting in my way?