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    Mumble Bee The writer formerly known as Chained. Contributor

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    Ever so Slightly escalated

    Discussion in 'Writing Prompts' started by Mumble Bee, May 25, 2016.

    Alright, so i'm not sure if this is a thing, or if i'm making it up out of bordome.

    Here's the deal, i'm going to post a normal situation, and every concecutive post afterwards needs to ever so slightly escalate the situation.)

    Examples of how NOT to do this

    Toast, I thought i'll make toast.
    I pulled a butter knife out of the kitchen drawer.

    Wrong example;

    I knew it wouldn't be enough to defend myself from the swat team that suddenly burst through my door and windows!

    Right example;

    Only there were no butter knives, i was going to have to use a spoon.
    Things were about to get messy.
     
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    Good idea to advertise your book, but of course now your avatar does not cover up your real name any more, R.M.
    I will take your statement under that (about correcting you), if you really wish: you are posting with lots of typos or mistakes, I am not sure what they are. To list a few: should be boredom (not bordome), consecutive (not concecutive), I (not i) for first person (I suppose that is from texting), "example" followed by a colon, not a semicolon , comma after "thought" etc. I understand that you are writing quickly, but you might scare potential contributors away like this.

    Now, I am assuming that your beginning example is
    Toast, I thought, I'll make toast.
    I pulled a butter knife out of the kitchen drawer.
    Curious, I thought. There seems to be a bit of blood on it. I don't remember cutting myself.
     
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    I turned the faucet to rinse the knife. The water was slightly red.
     
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    Seraph751 If I fell down the rabbit hole...

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    I froze, the water drowning out the sounds of the t.v. in the other room.
     
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    I tilted my head in confusion, wondering if I had taken my risperdone today, and quickly turned the water off and back on in shock.
     
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    Then I remembered. Shit, I didn't take the pill. I went over to my draw, only to find the medicine box empty. I forgot to turn the water off.
     
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    So I turned the water off. Then back on. Then I went to my other medicine box and that was empty, too.
     
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    There's one last place I could've put it, I thought, and I opened the drawer beneath the sink just to find a buttered bagel.
     
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    But no! Behind the bagel! Was that... a severed...?
     
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    "that's revolting" i thought as i brushed aside the fingernail and took the bagel to the trashcan...
     
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    As I lifted the bagel out of the trashcan I discovered the rest of the severed hand (that belonged to the fingernail) holding on to the other end it (the bagel).
     
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    well, that turned into some Evil dead stuff pretty fast!
     

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