I'm having a few problems with the novel I'm trying to write. It's a fantasy/sci-fi novel, but it's one where the main protagonist comes from a modern-day "real world." The entire first chapter takes place here, and it is only in the second chapter that she travels to the other world. Now, the first chapter is extremely dull to write. So much so that it's difficult to stay focused on writing for more than a few minutes at a time. Though this is a bit annoying, I decided to press forward anyway and just go through with it, but looking back upon my text, there seems to be another problem: Reading it is dull as well. A friend critiqued what I have so far and told me that it needs to be trimmed down. I agree; it is way too long. It spends too much time discussing how the protagonist is feeling. But at the same time, I feel like shortening it will make it seem too rushed, and make her actions and feelings less believable. For example, the main character ends up reading a friend's diary (for a reason significant to the plot, mind you,) but I want the reader to know she feels intense remorse over doing so. I don't think simply saying "she felt guilty," will get the point across properly. I want her to wrestle with herself internally over whether or not she should do it. But doing that to its fullest effect takes up a significant portion of the page; something I should avoid. That is but one of many areas that I need to fix. I really need help with getting this done so I can move on to the good part. What should I do?