I posted a prologue to the main action of a story on this thread. The story I intended to write concerns MC's action of vengeance against Benedict. As a brief story of "A does a dastardly an highly original deed to B", it lacks plot, and is not a proper story. A big question is "Why did he do it?" So, I started with a backstory, to lead up to the main events. The "doing the deed" story would not be particularly long, so I wanted to just set the stage and get on with it. That's when I found the "voice" and tried to use the circumlocutious or quaint-polite speaking that is reminiscent of Poe or Lovecraft, and harmonizes with the idea of MC having a warped mind. After writing this opening, and getting some feedback, I need to rethink how I put it all together. Assuming the full story is rather short, how should I tell this story?