Well, this is a new forum to me, just discovered while scouring Google for spelling sounds. I am 32 years old and a big kid at heart, I am married and work full time in an electrical retail store. I am currently participating in an online RPG on Facebook. Its a text base role play within the Elder Scrolls Universe. Each day I write a short passage about my journeys in this fantasy world. I would love to get feedback as I am a huge fan of writing but did not fair well in my educations, thus would like some critique to give me an idea of where I am going wrong.