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  1. Elgaisma

    Elgaisma Contributing Member Contributor

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    How to handle bird speak lol

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Elgaisma, Aug 24, 2010.

    OK my character is in bird form is this just a squawk or should it have its own line like speech does?

     
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    Since you are in the POV (head) of the bird and you are telling us what the bird is thinking, I think it is probably unnecessary to add "bird dialogue".

    That is, unless you feel brave enough to pull it off!
     
  3. Elgaisma

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    lol my first book is first tense present tense from point of view of a 17 year old boy. My second is from POV of a 29 year old gay man. I am stupid and naiive enough to be brave:)

    But it is more when the birds squawk, tweet etc at a human to indicate their emotion or feeling on a subject. I am unsure if its speech or not.

    I do have a scene in a short story with bird speak in it, one of my characters whilst in bird form gets picked up by a sparrow called Maggie May:) I use it for the flirting scene and the one where she is unhappy their son hasn't been kicked out the nest yet:) She reckons his father is mollycoddling him. That I handled like dialogue its more the communication between bird and human that I am unsure of.
     
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    it's up to you... try different ways and go with the one you like best... don't try to write 'by committee' or your work will turn out looking like a camel!
     
  5. Elgaisma

    Elgaisma Contributing Member Contributor

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    or maybe like a Monty Python;)

    I just wondered if there was a convention for how to approach my bird trying to 'speak' to his brother:)

    Having gone with a commitee of friends have decided to treat the squawks, tweets etc as speech
     
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    I like tweets. It conveys fluttery things with tiny minds making cheerful noises.
     
  7. Elgaisma

    Elgaisma Contributing Member Contributor

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    That works great for my sparrows etc I actually think my squawk needs to be a screech as in the example given its a falcon speaking lol I also have cooing in the next one for a race of people that can become doves:)

    The tweeting was fun to do when I rewrote a story called Sparrow Through the Heart, you get the impression they are giggling away.
     

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