im working on a timeline with the basic events of my history but cant get the wording to sound as good as http://www.halopedia.org/Unified_Earth_Government/http:/ http://www.destinypedia.com/Destinypedia:Timeline to save you time, there is a sub section called pre golden age and there is another about the interplanetary war, now...i noticed there were similarities between my story, and theirs, so i decided to write my paragraphs to sound as profesional as the ones that have similar plots. i have the general idea of what happens, but cant phrase it, what is wrong with it!? here is a sample of the first "era" Pre- Age of Eden 21st Century The present day -As overpopulation and unrest mounted on Earth, a number of new political organizations are formed and tasked with attempting to avert the crises of the next century by solving governmental unification issues of colonizing non-Earth territories. Fifty years after the subsequent formation of these organizations, terraformation is discovered. The Genesis, the first human colony ship, is launched, laden with troops and terraforming gear to spearhead the colonization of the Moon. The Age of Eden Humans begin colonization of the Solar System, and the Age of Eden, a centuries-long era of widespread prosperity and technological advancements, begins. if you read briefly the paragraphs in the link you will see how i want to phrase it, but am having difficulty manifesting it on paper, now i'll admit, I've never been good at grammar and mechanics, so any help would be greatly appreciated!