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  1. Padme Skywalker

    Padme Skywalker New Member

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    I need another word for this

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Padme Skywalker, Jun 20, 2011.

    I didn't see any other place to post this, so I hope this is the right place.

    This is an excerpt from a fanfiction I'm writing:

    I need help with either finding another word for cut or rephrasing the bold words entirely. Or does it sound fine the way it is?
     
  2. JimFlagg

    JimFlagg Contributing Member

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    He reaped it like Death him self.
     
  3. Suadade

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    he struck it down with great vengeance and furious anger.
     
  4. Mallory

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    and with a victorious war cry, he.....

    ripped it from its roots
    crushed it into a pulp of rotting earth
    tore it from the ground
    hacked it away from its stem like severing a limb
     
  5. Quezacotl

    Quezacotl Contributing Member

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    ...war cry, he tore it from the ground.

    Or keep the first phrasing. Choose whatever you find quick, simple, and adequate.
     
  6. Trilby

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    slashed it down.
     
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    he devoured it with...*insert cutting weapon*
     
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    Honestly, I don't mind 'cut it down' at all.

    Though maybe 'painstakingly sprayed it with a generic glyphosate, fretting all the while that a branded product might have been a better bet, and stood about for six days waiting for it to take effect.'
     
  9. Padme Skywalker

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    Thanks for the help, everyone! :-D I think I may go with "struck it down."
     
  10. colorthemap

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    smart don't abuse adjectives and adverbs.
     
  11. Suadade

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    ... "with great vengeance and furious anger."
     
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    "he mowed it down"
     
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    Prefer showing to telling.
     
  14. AmyHolt

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    I personal like JimFlagg's idea. He reaped it like Death him self.

    Although I wouldn't use it, I liked the hummor in art's comment.
     

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