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    Is this a good way for two MC's to meet?

    Discussion in 'Plot Development' started by MisterOz_GatorLover, Apr 27, 2011.

    One way Billy and Sarrah could meet is by meeting at a dinner party where Billy notices Sarrah come in and then tries to order from her (she is volunteering as an order taker) but is behind a customer who keeps changing her order and when her food arrives, throws a fit at Sarrah. Billy escorts this customer out and tells her to stop bothering Sarrah. He makes the customer leave while Sarrah thanks Billy.
     
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    This is just "MY OPINION" so please take no offense to it please! I like the concept of the customer getting frustrated and throwing a fit but having your MC throw them out is a little unrealistic. Is Billy an employee at the place they are at, if so does he have the authority to throw them/escort them out? All questions you should ask, but the idea is a good one none the less. Perhaps you might have him intervene somehow.
     
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    I agree with your sentiments/advice drayelya.

    The concept of a "white knight" is cool and used constantly in the fiction world but doing something like that might be out of the ordinary. I mean, if another customer came up to you and tried to escort you out, would you even bother leaving?

    I know what you're thinking? "But I'm not doing anything wrong. Not like the rude customer anyways." Sure, in your eyes you're not doing anything wrong. Then again, that's how the customer sees it as well.

    Unless your Billy character is really abrasive, out of control, and confrontational, then it is very unlikely that a situation like this will be pulled off unquestionably.
     
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    Yeah...I've actually been in situations at work where I had an angry customer and kicked them out, then was approached by a male customer saying "yeah, that was getting out of hand, I was about to come up and tell him to get out." Honestly, while it's a nice sentiment, I would probably have been really pissed off if I was dealing with a situation and some male customer I'd never met came in to 'rescue' me.

    Of course, that's just one violently independent girl's opinion.
     
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    I think Billy should turn into a T-1000 and threaten to tear the ladies eyes out if she doesn't behave :p
     
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    I agree with this. I'd feel the exact same way..

    However, if the character is supposed to be domineering or controlling -- or maybe even just heroic with a temper -- it could work.
     
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    A story concept means nothing. I can tell you now, it has all been done before. What matters is how you write it, the characterization, the flow, the imagery, all of it.

    There's no benefit in asking what other people think of the concept! They'll either say,"Sounds great," or, "it sounds like a ripoff of..."

    If the idea stirs you, write it. Then ask people what they think of the final story. After they tell you what they don't like about it, revise it, usually several times, until you're happy with it or until you throw up your hands and say the hell with it.

    Please read What is Plot Creation and Development?
     
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    Oh yes! All day long, this :D Don't get in my way, buddy, I got this :D LOL!

    Now, when I was younger, it was different. But these days? Uh-huh... I don't need your help. I usually get offended when men offer it too, like I'm helpless or something. I try not to, but... I fail. Almost every time.
     
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    Maybe Billy could have a gun and shoot the customer in the head
     

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