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  1. Milady

    Milady Contributing Member

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    Off-the-wall question:

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Milady, Feb 20, 2008.

    I have a whole plot mapped out for a gladiator-style story, and because of the satirical nature of the story I must include an obligatory "We who are about to die salute you!".

    So... how would I write that in a singular form while still keeping it in that recognizable form? Nothing I'm coming up with sounds quite right. Like... "I who am about to die..." or "I that...". Odd.

    Should I just ditch that little enterprise?
     
  2. MarcG

    MarcG Contributing Member

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    Maybe "The man who is about to die salutes you!"?
     
  3. LinRobinson

    LinRobinson Banned

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    "The others who were about to die, bugged out on me."

    Keep the plural. If royalty and editors can use it, so can gladiators. Since it's a satire, but a twist on it. "We who are about to die think you suck"

    "We who are about to die want to trade jobs with you"
     
  4. Domoviye

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    "We who are about to die, REALLY DON'T WANT TO!!!!"
     
  5. mammamaia

    mammamaia nit-picker-in-chief Contributor

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    how about, "We, who are about to have our guts spilled for your sick pleasure, salute your strong stomachs!"?
     
  6. Cogito

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    "We who are about to die... guys? Hey guys? Where did you all go?"
     
  7. LinRobinson

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    LOL
    Reminds me of "What do you mean 'we', white man?"
     
  8. Blackmirth

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    "I who am about to die salute you" sounds fine, I think. Perhaps put a couple commas in there.
    "I am about to die, and I salute you" ?
     
  9. Milady

    Milady Contributing Member

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    Heh, thanks. Now I have to come up with something remotely humorous to say.

    Lol, I like Cogito's...and Domoviye's... Maia, something tells me you have something against gladiatorial games... ;)
     
  10. mammamaia

    mammamaia nit-picker-in-chief Contributor

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    you think? ;-)
     

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