Hi all, I'm trying to work out what the best style is for the first sentence. I've been reading some articles that break down JK Rowlings style in Harry Potter. This style has always been a favourite even in TV shows (Merlin, the new Atlantis etc). So I've written similar sentences and would like to know what you think of each different type: 1. Even Claire knew she wasn't quite normal, but even she had a hard time accepting what just happened. 2. Claire dove for cover as the window shattered, covering her in glass 3. Claire dove for cover as the window shattered, raining shards of glass over her. 4. Smash. The window exploded. Shards of glass flew towards her. Claire threw her hands up. Blood trickled down her forehead and arm. For me, one feels great. This one came to me when reading the very first scene of Harry Potter The Philosopher's Stone. Number 3, I quite often find myself using more descriptive terms. Is this good? Or bad? Is it classed as too wordy? Number 4 I was going for the short, punchy sentences. Although the third sentence needs a re-word. Thanks heaps!