Just so you can see what I mean, compare my first chapter and rough draft in the writing workshop under "novels" with "The Lion, The Witch, and The Wardrobe" you can find somewhere online. Do you see the difference? The first is trying to explain every little detail and the latter just gives it one sentence and moves onto something else. The latter is 100x better than the former. It focuses more on story and not what they ate for breakfast and how they liked it leading to shitty novel. Link 1: http://www.writingforums.org/showthread.php?t=60320 Link 2: http://www.freebook4u.org/fantasticfiction/2010/141/5948.html Does anyone else spend too much time on details and not enough story? Also, this is why reading many books makes you a better writer.