Okay, so I would LOVE some other opinions here. I've been writing in my own style for so long, that it sounds great to me, but I want to make sure it flows for other readers as well. First of all, I've been writing a chick lit novel in first person, which I know is pretty much going against the grain. It's basically an entire novel done in internal monologue -- Does anyone feel like this could be something readable and interesting, or is it really better to go third person? Even if I do end up changing to third person, I would still want to incorporate a lot of internal monologue from the MC. Personally, I like to know what the character's actually thinking. But I don't want it to reach the point of being annoying or whiny. Secondly, because it basically follows a woman's thought process throughout this period of her life, there are abrupt stops, half-sentences, etc. Example (non-dialogue): No. Absolutely not. I wouldn’t even consider it. Okay… I’d consider it. But I sure as hell wasn’t going to do it. Example (non-dialogue): I was stupid. Incredibly freaking stupid. Not for the first time in my life. Sadly, probably not for the last time, either. I was an idiot! Again, is it something that works depending on the context, or is it just annoying?